Yo just illin!
 

Young K in the place to be where most of these niggas can't fuck wit me! Yeah i get heated but no one ever knows, basically what i said is Fuck y'all hoes! All Y'all bitches get gunned up and clapped quick! Like Mothafuckin GKillaz need to get off dick! He's just dickin like rainman be twichin, or be gay like that dude named umm... Ambitchion! Yeah that's right! I just lost, but you the mothafucka who gon pay the cost! See i pay the cost to be my own boss and nigga you can't touch the ice that i floss! Yo, Homes don't get me wrong i pack heat too! Step to me the wrong way! Blaow! What you gonna do! I Come from a place where you'd get lost! Walk down the wrong block... you pay the cost! I'm so damn ill i make you sick, you gay ass fag suck my dick! NO don't do that cuz i ain't that way and with 6 holes in ya chest on the ground you lay! I hate how niggas say i lose when they ain't good who's the hell else to choose! Anyway that dude is gay but moving on i got something else to say! One night i fucked this girl, her name was tina, and she got so wet it was like aquafina! So i end wit this shit goin back to my party! Gotta go mothafucka while i'm drinkin Barcardi!

all i can say is LOL, that is the most choppy thing i have ever read...no where in there did you make a lick of sense, your rhymes should stay on the shelf like mother gooseLOL

ok whatever i take critisim and i give but whatever i don't care!

Im so glad you thought about me thank you much. Your not takin the "L" real well....

What are you talking about whatever don't get mad cuz i used you in my raps! if we battle again make sure you're on time and no d/r's ok thanks!

Yo! Next time it's straight up what do you feel bout the rap straight up HOlla at ya boy!

ill tell you what sweetheart....wanna dish criticism
ill see you when you get bitchslapped
so battle me done....

BTW: who are you fuckin blind furry from mtv....holla at cha boy...or an andone all star....get your shit legit meet me toe to toe.....

look you think your hot but look at that record you got//
punk pussy,a "blazin" rapper you are definetly not//
i define fame fortune with michevious ways//
im the type to robb you infront of jesus on christmas day//
dog, every one sits here and knows your fake//
we look at your name kid, and knows ya born in 88'//
sit back, rise up, hand get some battles under ya belt//
don't trip just take the loss, like the hand u was delt//

***here it is***

this is the challenge kid, don't put yoru tail between your legs and run back to ya house//
this aint no game neiter, i gets the cat(pussy) your left at home playin with your mouse..

you got 3 days, holla at Cha DAD!

Yeah ok Next! Umm i need to know what else i can work on

yeah yeah yeah ok! Nice dis Thanks! Oh god! Next!

Structure Structure Structure
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All of it

Keep elevatin' cat

need to work on structer......
vocab........
punches.........
rhyme scheme........

one love.......

Can't be mad holla at ya boi!

Once again LKD! son i'll tell you right now you need some serious help! If this is what the fuck you actually think is ill! Goddamn! you need some real time to sit back and think do you really wanna destroy my reputation! Thinkin you could beat me! Fuck you son! Goddamn!