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Dedd Sirius v. FroXen
standard rules.
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due date is either tonight or tomorrow night you choose
im coming with ten to twelve lines i suggest you do too |
tomorrah night. i gots too much flossin and pimpin to take care of t'day.
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X, honkies was sayin how your bars are like empty ziploc bags, dey lack hits...i hate ta see ya try to match wits with diss cause my rap fits result in raspy spits and clenched fists...ya spill hate, but i eat it like beef, rap teeth lacerate u like fat chicks on coral reefs...ya spits it like invoices, they come padded, they cum flatted with no hype added...first ta spit, preemptin any chance that ya hit, alright bitch, bring it, lets see what ya bit...
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You May Have Won Alot In The Past But I Hope Your Focused To Win This...
The Only W Youll Get Is From Making The Voters Loose Interest// Not Yet A Vet So Dont Front Like Your Lines Are The Best... Their Harder To Follow Then The Ones Drunks Walk For Sobriety Tests// Your Verse Has No Kind Of Structure And Your Rhyme Layout Needs Some Rest... Maybe Thats The Reason Why Your Whole Drop Reminds Me Of A Lazy Architect// If A Victory Is On Your Mind Simply Forget It And Stop With The Small Talk... Because Ive Outlined Your Whole Future And The Topics Are All Chalk// Our Records Are Even But Your Fames Sinkin And Im Quick To Counter Punches... I Wont Call You Poor White Trash Because Even Thats Out Of Your Budget// I Dont Know Much About You But Siriusly Im Gonna Win And You Wont... When It Comes To The Talent I See Rumor Has It But You Dont// little keystyle for this n00b ready for voters |
X, honkies was sayin how your bars are like empty ziploc bags, dey lack hits...i hate ta see ya try to match wits with diss cause my rap fits result in raspy spits and clenched fists...ya spill hate, but i eat it like beef, rap teeth lacerate u like fat chicks on coral reefs...ya spits it like invoices, they come padded, they cum flatted with no hype added...first ta spit, preemptin any chance that ya hit, alright bitch, bring it, lets see what ya bit...
not a bad verse great pouchlines and metas yiou could qwork on your structure so you can get a flow goin if you add a few more lines it would have equaled to a bigger chance of winning over all keep elevating ---------------------------------------------------------------- You May Have Won Alot In The Past But I Hope Your Focused To Win This... The Only W Youll Get Is From Making The Voters Loose Interest// good intro Not Yet A Vet So Dont Front Like Your Lines Are The Best... Their Harder To Follow Then The Ones Drunks Walk For Sobriety Tests// good werd laying in her nuice pounchline Your Verse Has No Kind Of Structure And Your Rhyme Layout Needs Some Rest... Maybe Thats The Reason Why Your Whole Drop Reminds Me Of A Lazy Architect// lol...nice personals and pouchlines to follow thru and good meta If A Victory Is On Your Mind Simply Forget It And Stop With The Small Talk... Because Ive Outlined Your Whole Future And The Topics Are All Chalk// ok verse still keeping it strong Our Records Are Even But Your Fames Sinkin And Im Quick To Counter Punches... I Wont Call You Poor White Trash Because Even Thats Out Of Your Budget// thats low strong rascial comment I Dont Know Much About You But Siriusly Im Gonna Win And You Wont... When It Comes To The Talent I See Rumor Has It But You Dont// well this was most definitalty a stronger verse with strong personal and pouchlines but cut the rascial comments dawg vote FroXen |
dis was a nice battle....
FroXen came wid some hard punches some were a bit played....no flow....structure was basic.....personals need some work.......wordplay was nice....overall...7/10.. Dedd Sirius punches came hard.....nice flow....structure was basic.....personals need work tho........wordplay was ok....overall....7.5/10 v/Dedd Sirius keepit up both of you....aaaaiiggghhttt!!!!!! |
thanx yahs for da votes.
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seen as i took da time to vote on dis battle...please can you leave a honest vote on dis....
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=115323 |
wow cant believe lyrical voted for dedd. guess they are good friends.
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3 days without a vote
uppin |
froxen got this battle.simply froxens verse made since and dedd sirius verse not.it didnt even out like a lennox lewis and tyson fight.
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Froxen's verse had good wordplay some nice punches and made me a lugh a couple times.
Dedd i just read right through yours... Don't get me wrong it was good. Just Froxen Overpowered ya here. Vote Froxen |
And since i voted on this can ya vote on my battle with ][\/][.o.|B..... Thanks
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3-1 uppin for one last time
first to 5 wins |
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