The World Today
 

in a world of oppression, depression comes a manifestation.
all around us is the killing of people who bare close relation.
to save this world all we need is a bit of dedication.
but dedication is slim due to laziness and boredom.
is a green earth really to hard to imagine?
well it is now due to greed and aggression.
when will the wars sease to make a decrease in corpses.
too many people fill cemetaries turning up in hearses.
why is it that people can write verses for others to pay attention?
but no one does because theres too few cares to mention.
people are killed everyday because of people tension.
we should forget the greed oppression and deprevity.
so people can pay more attention and begin to see.
what a great world we have, and that we are all free.

nice serious message, the structure was really nice.
you had nice vocabulary and rhymes
keep it up

have you ever been in a fight
were you have no right
to say what you want to say
and nothin is going your way
because it'z jus' not your day
your next weapon is a knife
you done tryed wit a rope
your on to much dope
times up, over

nice shit man! had great rhyme scheme!
and good vocab!


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