pergatory
 

yo im feelin kinda caught between heaven and hells kinda hot,
suspended in time comin up with rhymes losin my mind in this madness.
do i apply what i know or just forget what im taught so distruaght,
searchin for the awnsers in a world of sadness.
so confuzed what did i lose i spend my life feeling used and abused,
i woke up in a dream wanting to scream cant come to grips with what is real,
i have to deal with the paths i chose,
and express the issues i feel.

yo, that was pretty personal.
but you need to work on have equal syllables on each line.
work on that and it will look more like a poem.

yah it was a hard read for a poem

but i love the topic


one love........

yeah the structure was messed up with the rhyming you used. Was kind of hard for me to read to, thoug it was pretty good.