authentic vs. afterword
 

ill post mine in a minute

authentic will...take ya head clean of ya shoulders
and give free beat downs to wannabe soldiers
he dont even want war with this
the brain tells the wrist to write the shit till u no longer exist
no need to even bring out the fists
slap up this kid like......im ricks james bitch
and u know the flows water, so im doin the freestlye
u need to see how i give beat downs to street clowns
who probaly never leave town and sleep in night gowns
and u wanna call me a coward like u got some nerve
now i know i smell pussy so u must be irv
and u need to know i come from baaaad news
and i got baaaad news, u will lose
and thinkin u were gonna win was just obserd
so ill battle u now, and beat ya ass afterword

are u gonna reply? cuz i mean my flow got kinda fucked up in the middle. it would be cool if some people would tell me what they think or what i could improve on.

Did this guy give up already? This isnt time for peer responses, but i will school you.
but dont rush yur dissapointment im at work so ill holla on my break.

"If u stay ready, u aint gotta get ready"
-suga free, a real pimp now go cop dat album

that was flame word up
 

that was sick

aint givin up just being honest. and trying to get u to reply.

the moment u benn waitin 4

Alight I peeped your flow, and I was wit it until the end
Homie please stick 2 da pen, because in a real squab u kant contend/
No need to pretend, I’ll put u in a state of vegetation
Without hesitation, to yur creator you’ll b contemplating/
Complaining of mental anguish, from my subliminal penetration
Lyrical laceration will leave you shriveled like a raisin/
Raving, telling all the patients, reminiscing and demonstrating
Of how yur flows were so amazing,
Until Afterword took the stage, man! /
So now your back 2 the basics, getin down with street clowns
And battling random base heads, just to get a base hit/
U sold yur playstation and TV, so periodicals u must read
And the bad news is…
U says your brain tells your wrist to write this bull-shyt/
And your flows is as authentic
As a porno chic with silicon tits, teaching kindergarten/
So can u pardon a real emcee, as I tally up votes 1….2…3

alright thats the battle. so lets get the votes goin. first to 10

Nice battle!`
 

authentic01 u got murdered....da whole raisin amazin thing from Afterword waz tight.

uppin for more votes.

breakdown:

authentic's verse:

flow:i had problems finding it really wasn't that tight probably the worst part of the verse 5/10

volcab: some good rhyming nothing too complex gets the job done overall 6/10

punches: i don't know didn't really see anything here it seemed like you spent more time rapping bout how you were better then actually disses afterword. best line was "who probaly never leave town and sleep in night gowns" i'd give 3/10

personals: nothing to say none 0/10

overall:14/40

afterword's verse:

flow:amazing utterly destoryed authentic all those multis in the first bars just great overall 9/10 best part of the verse

volcab: the first bars were great with all those huge words afterwards you settled down into average but still top notch 9/10

punches: nothing to direct but enough to get past authentic fav line was, "And your flows is as authentic As a porno chic with silicon tits, teaching kindergarten/" sick you hurt the guy with that 8/10


personals: all over this part most of the lines directed at authentic and not your self or just general punches good job 7/10

overall: great verse you really handed this guy his heart after you ripped it out 33/40

vote goes to afterword, authentic did alright but was really outmatched here

everybody is really voting on this one.

damn this is lame how urone iz sleepin on us
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votes por favor!

a week later
and im the last one to post

laaammmmeeeee!!!!

man authentic just go home and go to sleep and take a load off


aftwerword my vote goes to u

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