The Forsaken
 

Your A Cursed Mc
Who's Never Heard Of Beef,
Does The Third Degree Burns Dispersed From Heat
From Behind My Serpent Teeth
Make It Hurt To Breathe?
Ya Had The Nerve To Think You Can Unearth The Beast.....
Now Leave The Murder Scene
In Urgent Need Of Emergency Treatment,
But Surgery Performed At The Infirmary
Are Currently Seein',
Number 3 And Your Like 4,223
So This Means You Wont Be Seen Until At Least Next Weekend
My Enemies Are Left Weakened, Seepin'
Like Leakin' Sink Valves,
Theres Reasons For Not Fuckin' With Me And The Team Pal,
Hmmmmmmmmmm, Let Me See...get Him!!!
Now Your Catchin' A Verbal Beatdown
You Scream "owwww!!!"
But All I Hear Are Feet Pounds (thump, Thump, Crunch)
From Me And My Peeps As We Cleet Clowns,
So Delete Doubts Of Me Meeting Defeat Now,
Or Be Meat When Its Time To Feed,
S.v. Out!!!!!


(give Me Some Constructive Criticism On This And The Rest Of My Verses In Open Mic. Holla At Ya Boy. One.)

yo that was some nice wordplay. i like your shit dawg.

also, i berely told chekmate today about his shit. supreme gave me the verses he told me to pm them to you which im about to do in a sec.
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demolish the I.G. from chryme syndicate.

yo ya'll come support and vote http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=116325 i loved it S.V...u knew i wud dawg...PM me

"Does The Third Degree Burns Dispersed From Heat
From Behind My Serpent Teeth
Make It Hurt To Breathe?"

- Liked that bit the best. Try to keep lines the same length - and make the bars fit in (e.g - 8, 16 or 32 Bars/Lines). Nice Vocabulary though.
Pe@ce

dis was ok...nufin specail...wordplay was nice..try to make longer lines and use multipus...keep it up dawg....6/10

Does Anyone Have Any More Feedback For Me? I'd Like To Hear What You Guys Think About This Verse And/or My Others.

Supervillain Of The Crhyme Sindicate

WOAH! WOAH! WOAH! damn how many of these do you got.......

great shit.....

one love.....