Check the real thin(Freestyle)
 

Every rapper wanna rap about gunz, drugz,
And money like their not rappers but thugz//
I'm here to rap about real things like Kanye West,
But i know that to be a rapper u gotta have Smith n West//
On yo' chest u gotta wear a vest like u're scared of 50,
Shots from sum1 like if u're who when 10cent's minused from 60//(scared like 50 Cent)
Anywayz check it.......
My skillz are so ill; i can do God's will,
Includin' dismissin' any emcee from dis' battle field// (killin' dem')
I'm usin' my rhymes as weapons of mass destruction,
And inevitable shields and barriors of protection//
I'll end yo' career as fast as an eviction,
From dis' battle field i'll send u to get a Order Of Protection// (Against me)
Most emcee are fake; they only rap about money and prostetution,
Like if their the owners of a money or prostetutional orginization//
These rappers are just fake; they need to be detected, disfigured and hopefuly reconstructed,
Like a new building after the blueprint is skeched and edited//
I'm a Rhythmically Accentuated Poet, dat's whippin' bitches with sonnets,
And providin' all sucker emcees with a whole lot-a-regrets//
My lyrics keep blazin' and illin' like Run-Dmc and Kanye West,
To put u aside like an 'Heart Attact' after 'Cardiac arrest'//
I got poisionous gasses and u're a pest,
Dat's irritatin' but causin' me to be and produce the illest// (illest flows)
Dis' is just a lilttle something; come back fo' de' rest,
And make sure dat' u wear yo' bullet proof; and lyrics proof vests// :shoot: Aimin' fo' ya'.......

...Stopped reading after about 6 lines. Just Sounded A Bit Basic, Nice Line Scheme, But You Need To Work On A Better Topic. Keep Spitting Though.
Pe@ce

dis was wack...to basic...evaluate bro...no beef but gota drop opinon...

you fuckin suck. thats some of da worst shit i've ever heard in my life. it was too borin, too basic everything was just terrible.

wat?

To simple yo, need more feedback, got a point on da wak rappers.



I live what I spit,
I spit what I live. Peace dog: work on yo shit

thats cool..