work in progress wantin sum feedback
 

Wana fuck with me, then your fucking with g's
We never say please bitches just get on their knees
Dont matter what we blaze brakken or green.
ethier fuckin way were gena lean
This aint a game were brining torture and pain
use singles semis or automatics
were used to straight jackets, rude boys runnin heavy drug rackets
think your crazy as this
You've never witnessed a breda drink his own piss
were just g's ryhming
exact pin point timin lyrically redefining
Watch them miner hoes
Gold diggin for designer clothes
Spend your money like its theirs to own
You need to stop spreading that lie, i rest easy at night knowin you gena die
Consider this a truce until the next full moon
im letting you know that death will be here soon
Wait with baited breath till were rage filled creatures
Destroying your face when i carve of your features
Handling missions like the best, expect nothing less
thugged out killers resembling the sas

da beginnin iz wacc cuz its old as hell im tired of hearin da same line with please and knees itz bout 5 or 6 years old, but some lines were hot some were not
faovorite was "watch them minor hoes gold diggin for designe clothes"
but whe u said "think your crazy as this you've never witnessed a breda drink his own piss" it sound like some eminem shit. theres only one eminem

it was bangin.
you should focus on elevation.
expand your vocab.
other than this nice job.

Need to work on word structure and wordplay. And try to make ya beginnin hot as shit

not bad, keep elivating, maybe work on the complexity and being creative saying new shit in new ways not old shit in new ways

Good, but juss think of a better subject.

Coming back at Da-One:
great comments but needed to come back on that shit about eminem: Double c has an older brother, who did, on new years eve 2001, under the influence of weed, pills, mushrooms & vodka, and on a most cruel of cruel dares, to prove he could go beyond what most mortal men are capable of: he assumed a possition of that which is associated with the "upside-down bycicle kick" found most prominently in "legs, bums & tums" classes across the atlanitic and beyond. From this possition, he did piss, long & hard into his own mouth, rising thereafter to declare..."I am KING OF THE PISS-DRINKERS..." before exiting swiftly stage left to the bathroom.

Vidieo Footage is available on request

Not bad CC, Just gotta watch out for fallin out of rythm. Some of the lines kinda dropped off too early. I can't comment too much on your style, cause...it's your style, but if you want word, try to come off tha velveta.