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accomplishment Vs Adept
10 Lines Max!
No Hate No D/R No Crew No BULLSHIT VOTES!!! you spit first!! |
you fucked up you getta make it a battle try again bitch by the way its a blind spit no feedin
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aight chekcin in dawg do in thirty min dont spit none of your pre written bowl shit
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AIght
Lets do dis, adept about to lose dis,circumstances leavin bitches full of bruises... regardless of my newness, the vet inside me gonna leave a kid or two clueless... No S.I. but you da cover page of dis new MAGAZINE...(like a clip for a gun) From dis machine, my banana clip empties into your entire regime... my methods are abusive but you couldnt cause me to choke if ya rhymes were fuckin neuses... but i see right threw dis, like your dog ate yo rhyme book i'm sick of fuckin excuses... nevertheless if you leave bleedin so u barley typin somthin to take my time fo readin... but my rhymes like nicotine cuz ill shit is what people needin... But dawg you completly gettin my nomanation for the best sport of public humiliation... cuz yo rhymes is nondestructive until mine are obliteratin... But like i'm DRUNK and bizzare, i spit BARS, that iller than cases of SARS... Cuz yo got "Creamed" like "Vagisil" cuz i rub you out like bugs up on my window seal |
Match My Threats Son-My Style To Incredible For-Ur Brain Complex..
You Could Write Your Verse-Wit-a-Storm…An Wouldnt Reign- in-Text.. Accomplishment Gets Chewed Quick Nose Punched In, I Got The Crucifix Commin.. Your Kinda Like ''Water'', Cause When it 'Boils Down To it' Hes Nothin.. Accomp. Living A Lie I Send Fire-Optiks To Ya Brain Just To Scorch Ya Eye Killin Accomp. From Scratch’ Cause Battlin Adept? He Was Itching to Die.. Realise Adept's The Illest This Battles like Any Other Nobodys Takin u Serious.. Cause Your Flow Is Like The 'WNBA' Buthin But Bitchin And Periods.. Keeping Back My Joy...Rip Your Vital Ligaments From Where The Wack Joins.. In Fact The Point...He Couldn't Keep A Head Up Flipping Coins.. Put Up Your Fists To Box? I Almost Wince To Watch.. Cause I Stop Your State Of Flow Like Ships To Docks.. |
Uppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!
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Uppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!
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Dragon rage stormed on accomplishement.dragon rage you have complexity and thats koo with that punchline at the same time. nice verses cuzz
accomplishment: your verse was good but he took you over.just work on vocab and you should be koo. good job guys! Vote = Dragon Rage AYY CAN YALL RETURN THE FAVOR and vote for this battle heres the link PUERTORICANELLY vs. Re$tricted GOOD LOOKING OUT PEACE! |
Uppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!
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dr ok flow good punches work on vocab and personals and creativity u had alot of played lines
ac good flow good punches good vocab work on personals a vote ac he came a lil harder with better vocab and more creativity |
Uppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!
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The breakdown (Accomplishment):
Lets do dis, adept about to lose dis,circumstances leavin bitches full of bruises... regardless of my newness, the vet inside me gonna leave a kid or two clueless... >> Decent opener -- no punches per se but a lot of confidence, like the windup before the punches start coming. No S.I. but you da cover page of dis new MAGAZINE...(like a clip for a gun) From dis machine, my banana clip empties into your entire regime... >> Kinda flimsy wordplay. Would've worked better if you completed the gun analogy with something better than "clip empties into your entire regime". my methods are abusive but you couldnt cause me to choke if ya rhymes were fuckin neuses... >> Very good punch. but i see right threw dis, like your dog ate yo rhyme book i'm sick of fuckin excuses... >> This works, but barely. It's got comic potential but skates the line between funny and corny. nevertheless if you leave bleedin so u barley typin somthin to take my time fo readin... >> Huh? but my rhymes like nicotine cuz ill shit is what people needin... >> Filler, but okay. But dawg you completly gettin my nomanation for the best sport of public humiliation... cuz yo rhymes is nondestructive until mine are obliteratin... >> This reads funny and needs better structure to make more sense. But like i'm DRUNK and bizzare, i spit BARS, that iller than cases of SARS... >> More filler, but okay. Cuz yo got "Creamed" like "Vagisil" cuz i rub you out like bugs up on my window seal >> Strange way to end a verse, with a so-so punch like that. And "Vagisil" has so much more potential both as a concept *and* a rhyme-word than you wrung out of it. The breakdown (Adept): Match My Threats Son-My Style To Incredible For-Ur Brain Complex.. You Could Write Your Verse-Wit-a-Storm…An Wouldnt Reign- in-Text.. >> Lines have good flow but are hard to read, so at first glace they seem awkward. The "storm ... reign" wordplay is cool but "write your verse with a storm" doesn't make much sense. Accomplishment Gets Chewed Quick Nose Punched In, I Got The Crucifix Commin.. >> You really went all out for the rhyme scheme, but at the expense of clarity. Would've been better if the next line followed through on the "crucifix" imagery. Your Kinda Like ''Water'', Cause When it 'Boils Down To it' Hes Nothin.. >> Good punch. Accomp. Living A Lie I Send Fire-Optiks To Ya Brain Just To Scorch Ya Eye Killin Accomp. From Scratch’ Cause Battlin Adept? He Was Itching to Die.. >> Nice wordplay. Realise Adept's The Illest This Battles like Any Other Nobodys Takin u Serious.. Cause Your Flow Is Like The 'WNBA' Buthin But Bitchin And Periods.. >> Decent punch. Keeping Back My Joy...Rip Your Vital Ligaments From Where The Wack Joins.. In Fact The Point...He Couldn't Keep A Head Up Flipping Coins.. >> Eh. Again, the punch strength suffers so the rhyme scheme can stand out. Put Up Your Fists To Box? I Almost Wince To Watch.. Cause I Stop Your State Of Flow Like Ships To Docks.. >> Okay, here everything works: the rhyme scheme is nice and it all makes sense too. On the whole, Adept brought the better battle verse. I've seen him do better on other threads, and this time it looked like there was a good chance his opponent might take it. But not quite. |
good shit
accomp u had some nice shit but dragon took over like kobe in the 4th.....the water and boilin down to nothin bit was so cold u get my vote
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