This Rap Game (Freestyle)
 

Here is one I came up today:

I came into this game, thinkin’ that my rhymes were shit/
Kept on thinkin’ that the fuckin’ rap gloves won’t fit/
After showin’ ‘em to people, damn! I was a hit/
Laughter was not there, so my fire had been lit/
I had so much water in my eyes, I thought I could drown the Titanic/
But then I remembered, that it had sunk down the Atlantic/
Or was it the Pacific? Fuck it! I don’t know/
All I know is that I have picked up a bran’ new flo/
I now have learned, to respect this rap game/
Taggin’ around SPuL, as MY rap name/
Hopin’, one day, that it will bring me all the glory/
Or all the ladies, don’t care, ‘longs they horny (haha)/
I be dissin’ lotta niggas. All in clean fun/
Just to prove my rhymes are, hotter than the sun/
And hot as the sun, be no metaphor/
I be the rap king. Now that’s one for sure!/

Feedback would be much appreciated! :thumbup:

that was good yo! I dont know about everyone else but I liked it.

Hmm, o.k, i was feeling some parts, other parts not so much.
This Part:
"I had so much water in my eyes, I thought I could drown the Titanic" Sounded a bit cheesy n cheap but this part:
"Kept on thinkin’ that the fuckin’ rap gloves won’t fit" was good. Keep At It

PE@CE

not bad, nto bad nothing to say overused topic but some nice line good flow and volcab use coulda used some multis to tighten it up but i'd give it 6/10