UnbornRookie \\\/// Afterword
 

Aight.
Here we go.
It's all you, Afterword.

yo nothin personal, cali luv

check, ima-bout to rip this kid like a scientific disection
so nextime "Afterword" in da house he headed in the other direction/
I’m like Johny, I’m on a quest man, no questions, no second guessin
Im killin this freshman, with no regrets, he gotta learn his lesson
Don’t test a real lyrical vet, you should earn yur respect, and learn from the bench
U can usually find me on a mission wit a swisher, tryin to stack my g
While yur slipin wishin u weren’t straped to an IV, but I see
The consequences b4 they happen, so how u gonna clap back
If afterword already claped ya, nigga!


Gotta smash out, hopefully this is enuf
Stay up rook

Ya rhymes is loose - they won't hold up - ya need suspendas /
'Cause you be fuckin yaself worse than hermaphroditic sex offendas /
I already know whatcha thinkin, fag - like that psychic bitch from Pretenda /
Thanks for bein my punchin bag, but i'm in serious need of some contendas /
You wanna choose we as ya weapon of suicide - go on - my P.O. 'll letcha /
I'll be doin my community service just by takin the life of a child molesta /
But unlike an Afterword - i ain't never gonna forget ya /
I'm too clever to ever fail to remember this memba... /
Who forever made me look better whenever I battled against ya /
Unfortunatley at the end of this battle, ain't nothin but laughter heard /
I'm so sorry to have to tell ya we ain't gonna need no Afterword /

well considering you both are new and shit it wasnt that bad you guys will elevate no doubt just keep at it and fuck da haters
both structures were kinda fucked both had some multis but overall i think unborn had some better punches after you guys elevate you should go at it again
v-unbornrookie

"don't get mad or hate me its not my fault your mom tried to rape me"
Krackmittens
advactous diabilo- join or die muther fuckers

yo..no doubt. It is madd late though. Anyways, you know i'm still uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuppppppppppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

UBR

i cant vote.. but i got to say, i like this line below..

you should earn yur respect, and learn from the bench

breakdown for unbornrookie:

flow:alright straight nothing complex gets the job done for the verse 7/10

punches:great attention paid to your oppenent through the whole verse good job here my fav line, "'Cause you be fuckin yaself worse than hermaphroditic sex offendas /" i'd give you 8/10 keep up the work

volcab:nice use of rhyming words no simple shit like bat,cat,spat no overall you were solid on this 7/10

overall:22/30

breakdown for afterword:

flow: slick flow nice use of multis to tighten it up even more best part of your verse easy 9/10

punches:nothing really addressing your oppenent the weak point of your verse for sure and it's a shame too, cause otherwise it was a good verse 5/10

volcab:good use here no repeated rhyme words or anything too simple both of you did good here 7/10

overall:21/30

vote-- unborn rookie, it was really a close battle it was the punches that pull him away here both of you did well though

yeaaaaa boyyy....i know this is a close one though...this afterword is pretty sick, but you know what????

i'm still uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuppppppppppppin!!!!

UBR

yo unborn rook u is a fool kid, but i like yo style
for those with real comments gud lookin out
for da haters, lick balls

what i want to know is why iz every1 i battle always talkin that gay shit. im all 4 a gud battle, but some of yall are over fixated with homosexual shit and it sounds personal!

"Afterword disperse divert blirts to quench the thirst of hip-hop experts"

damn....dog. You gettin butt hurt. Ain't know one hatin on you. And ain't no one d/r in here. I don't even have any peeps. Just take it like a man. It ain't over yet anyway. Is this how you born west coast fools act?

UBR

UUUUPPPPPPPPPPPIIIIIINNNNNNNN for this battle...not just myself!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

UBR

Good punchlines Unborn 6/10
Good medifores Afterward 5/10
N nice flow 2

v=UnbornRookie

dont get it twisted like a licorice boy, nobody salty off this chump ass battle, chill out.
i can comment, just like u do after every vote, u simple ass nigg
and dont disrespect the coast

weside wsup nukkah ahah
mind tellin me which part of LA u from kid

Yo...i'm a say peace. Just leave it at that yo. Now ya'll wanna get gangsta through the net. Gimme a break. Don't take this shit too seriously. I ain't tryin to stress no one out. Still uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuppppppppppppppppppin!!!!!!!

UBR