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My Story
This is something I took the time to write. It might be considered a poem, but I don't know. It's some deep shit. It's about how when I was like in the 3rd grade in VT, and I was the only colored person at the whole school. Some fools hated on me for that, but I didn't let that bug me. I also, became really popular at that school, believe it or not. It also talks about how I hate it that almost every 3 years of my life, I move to another place. Which really sucks. Well here it is:
I didn’t grew up in the hood, and didn’t live that hard a life/ I had no need for GATs, cuz where I live there be no fights/ I have a lotta money to spend. But that don’t make it right/ Cuz after 3 years end, we be getting on another flight/ I don’t think it’s cool, to be goin’ from place to place/ Seein’ so many fools, while goin’ from face to face/ Never had the time, to pick up that one good friend/ Where no matter what was said, the friendship would never end/ When I was young in school, I had to deal wit diversity/ I was the only kid not white. Went through all types of adversity/ I got called names… but I brushed ‘em to the side/ I always kept my dignity. I never ran to hide/ After seein’ wat they did to me, did not make me cry/ My peers came to my side, and like the sun, I did rise/ To a level where everybody liked me, and I was bein’ respected/ Bein’ the only black… that’s not what they expected/ Now I’ve grown up… and away have gone those warts/ Football and basketball, next year… will be my only sports/ Sports, rappin’, and death, are my exits from this world/ Only the first two let me return… to give this world a twirl/ When I was young… I never would have expected/ That I could go from rejected to… bein’ accepted/ This rap game… can lead niggas to glory/ This fo real, man… This be my story/ Be honest and lemme know what you think. PEACE :thumbup: |
what r u a military kid? As for this post In my personal opinions its a good ass read. screw punchlines and mets in a deep post. Good stuff.
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:laugh: lol, nah, I'm not a military kid. My dad works in a corporation, and he always has to go find a job somewhere else. So we have moved so many times. And we might be movin' to Cali this summer, which would suck. Who wants to move into a new high-school in ur junior year? Well, anyways, thanks for the compliments, yo. Any more feedback?
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Some Nice Lines there & Nice Vocabulary. Good Shit, Keep Dropping With The Same Sorta Flow. Pe@ce
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thanks, man. :thumbup: More feedback plz.
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*huggles*...Hehe i know how you feel /me knows this isnt the feedback you want :P
I was the only white girl in a high school for a term...It got violent and i left...I did cry tho :) Nice drop... |
that was some nice deep written!
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thanks, guys. :thumbup: Also, on Crews and Callaborations, I'm in a crew and we need some members. Go try out. It's the thread started by will a peer named "Startin' a crew"
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good drop "This is something I took the time to write" < not a freestlye then...some good vocab....word play was nice too...work on some mulit' and it will be dope...7/10...good work....keep it up..pz
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Thanks. :thumbup: If it isn't called a freestyle, what would it be called then? :huh:
Also, more feedback would be cool. :cool: |
uppin' for more feedback.
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that some deep shit.
nice fuckin drop. very,very dope. nice flow too. fuck da metas and punches. nice gettin deep. the main shit was dat not a lot of cats can relate to it. thats why i liked it. i do have fucked up life. well just by lookin at where im from you could tell its a rough place. you had good vocab. keep droppin . peace |
That's Some Real Talk.Deep Shit.
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thanks. :thumbup: Just wonderin', do you guys think I should do more shit like this, or go back to the funny type stuff, or just jump around?
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yo that shit is tight and deep i think u should keep it up. peace
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