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LOST CHILD...(feedback)
I was a lost soul lost child stuck in this game//
loosin my mind goin crazy and I was fillin' insane// I loved my father and my brother and I still miss them so much// loss after loss cut me deeper than any knife could touch// I remember all them late night fights with four fives and knifes// and when my mans went to jail for twenty five to life// cause he had to rob that clerk in that liquor store hiest// he was almost like my brother and we was so damn tight// but my real brother was just another casulty of war// I should of went for milk I should of went to that store// It should of been me cathin' that bullett from the four// I could never forget that image of him layed out on the flour// and my dad I pray for, lost a case now he sittin' in jail// it hurts so much that D block is the letter on his cell// and we never saw him cause we couldnt afford bail// I hope he's found god cause I dont wanna see him in hell// one love........ |
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niggas never give me feedback man...................
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yo its deep son but work on ya flow
topic touched me but you need some structure just feedin no beef peace |
That was great stuff! I am feelin' that. The flow and stuff were nice. The vocab could have been betta, but other than that it was really good. Keep droppin'. :thumbup:
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I appreciate the feedback.....
cause its hard to git feedback in here... one love....... |
yo dat shit was deep son i like it, it was hot
i lost my brother 2 so i know how u feel and i dont even know my bitch azz popz .....oh yeah fucc g-unit101....rollin 30, folk nation |
thanx for the feedback......
one love...... |
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