russian gulag
 

this was a school project and i need feed back to see if its good enuf for an A...
hope i posted this in the rite spot????



Russia

Loneliness, despair
Gruesome bodies everywhere,
The aroma of death overtakes the air,
Anguish, starvation,
Hunger, because of limited mastication,
A life filled with dreams? A life filled with devastation,
Frigidness, bacteria,
The overwhelming cold in the gulag’s in Siberia,
Decease’s in this weather can crush your whole criteria,
Leadership, inferior,
The dictators are oh so powerful and superior,
The people think that they are good, but their motives are ulterior
Anger, hostility,
Is all of this worth it? Or Is all of this done in futility?
This gulag has put me threw pain and suffering, and humility and left me with no more capabilities.
To oppress my abilities as a man.
Dictators? Gulags?

Nice' Playa.. I Like That.. Yeah' That Should Get You An "A" I Would Say...

rite some stuff that will help me...give me some tips...ideas...

I think it is good for the topic. Good vocab and some good imagery in there. Nothing really to say to help you, good poetry.

so should i add more imagery???so nothing really needs work????

It was good. Imagery is always a good way to write a poem, it makes the reader feel that much more into your piece.

alrite i think i no wat to do..i got to turn it in tommorow...i'll be sure to inform you on my grade....thank

hot shit hope you got a good grade on it dog.......

one love.....

should i do more poetry...for rb and shit like this....???..

If you want. I can't tell you what to do. But if ya gonna write more poetry im definantly up to see more from you. I have a lot more poetry to post up for you guys. :) Ill get one up soon

yo man i dont know too much about poetry or hot to write poetry..........but if i was a poet or ur techer i would give u an "A" on that nice job ro...............

so i guess you will see more poetry from me in the future......but this time it wont be school work........