Newest Verse !!!! Suggestions?
 

There is no end to this - no end at all /I've seen the visions, I've heard the call /The fires, they cursed in-sissons/ Its all fun n games till a lame ass gets hurt/
In my memory this fire burns / bleed for me / The day I return
The mind is black, this soul is free you have nothing agaist me / This isent the real person u see/ its the devil at work
The evil you fear is the anger i weave/
Impending doom, infecting the masses to decive all human beings/ To achive the greatest victory ill leave every g in a trash can/ Im not rappin bout attacking you but i am laghing at your music/ (haha) Grasp your self hold your emotions back for u light my fuse n loose it on every dude who gets rude/ Ill sickem like im the flu better belive this bitch/ Im commin to get you

good topic
good flow
work on vocab though 8/10

I liked it it was pretty good....

good topic dog.......

hot shit.....

one love......

Thanks this is kinda my rebound any more comments / suggestions?

Uppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

yo it'z good i have to give you that! jus' when you write next time and your writing a song don't do it in battle form use the texture