My Thoughts
 

I Was Born In Sydney, I Love Manila Philippines, But Its Fucked Up In So Many Places, Here Are My Thoughts, Tell Me What You Think

When I Look Into The Faces Of The People Within My Race,
I Can't Fathom Everything Shits A Big Disgrace,
I Cant Erase The Thoughts That Have Taught Me To Emrace,
A Way Of Life Thats Tight Thats Vanishing Without A Trace,
These Kids Have To Come To Grips In The Midst Of This All Shit,
The Bitch Of It Is No-Ones Rich And This Is It,
In The Pits Of Manila, Mobs And Shabu Dealers,
We Are Generating A Million Young Desperate Killaz,
And Villains Who Are Willing Concealin Not Penicillan,
And Fellin Like Theres No More Left Considered Thrillin,
Who Guzzle A Zillion Bots Of Gin And Then Go Pillin,
Theres No Alternative This Shit Is So Appealin,
For Every Day That Turns Im Feeling I Got The Nerve,
To Serve The People And Flush Out This Goddam Verve,
And Give 'Em What They Deserve And Preserve It For What Its Worth,
And Swerve On The Powers That Be Who Rule Their World,

I Was Born In Sydney, I Love Manila Philippines, But Its Fucked Up In So Many Places, Here Are My Thoughts, Tell Me What You Think (Cant Really See This)

But Yeah Color Is To Light

hot poem girl...........

good shit.......

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It was pretty good. Some good rhyme scheme. A good message. Good job.

Thanx Appriciate The Feed-Back! :) ...

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Thanks Ya'll

It was straight, COLORFUL, but straight

Aye Yo, Thanks Appriciate The FeedBack!! :)

420...
i dug this piece...similar rhyme scheme to what i put down....felt the flow automatically and appreciated what was given...
peep deep

very nice girl, other than the color. very nice to see that stuff sometimes instead of just steady battle rhymes.

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