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War
Lately the topic been the same as my mind state
confused and abused simply tempted and irate Swiftly with swords, cut cords and start war challenge whole cities, create new lands for explore for warn the first born of torn scorn and perplexity instantanious as Hex's be, bent back like the letter "C" First an foremost we'll sit back and just chill here's where I explain the strategies we'll make real Tempted like demon spawn, laid out on the table create templates of fable, unstable yet true combine lyrics and vocab make wars outcome anew to begin with simplicity means my minds all askew Once we begin, we'll set in right...here and once you're all in, settled in, set for years for the stronghold is weak if you know what to seek circle the town's whole begin at the streets Start at the backdrops, the farm stops, the cash crops cut off supply, straight deny all their town shops As soon as they see you're settled in and prepared they'll all start to pilledge and act like they're scared dont begin to presume you're aware of whats their they'll consume and confuse you, unleash undenied warfare counter this attack with swift beats and sly wordplay snap all the there hopes, contenue for eight days at the end of this onslaught put end to there ways go for the leader, attack like a cascade swade battle from one district, move on to another goto the core, rape, pilledge and plunder now at the new spot, they crew stops and see's all of this info their tactician forsee's at the end of this countdown, search high heaven and sea's for any people that may have escaped in the tree's now for the hunt that proclaims that you've won dont stop the carnage till day break's and dawn comes the sun will peak and you'll remain to display warfare unending, contending what may.. be it tomarrow or days down the road you'll know you fought well when whole cities emplode destruction by your hands, your ways.. displays what war gave unending to humanity's days |
nice drop dawg
It's flowed really well, Had very nice vocab Structure was good NIce emotion, nice drop keep it up, check out my latest open mic it's called "Rumors" peace |
um ... i read a lil then passed out sorry ! ..... just woke back up and wanted to let you know that it's nice g peace !
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great peice
great vocab excellent flow good emotion keep droppin its hot |
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hey yo that was some hot shit great structre great vocab great shit allover.......
one love.......... |
Hit up some more feedback, anything I could do better as far as topicals? Appreciated.
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id like 2 c u drop more om ur hot
keep droppin |
as for the piece, very nice, flows well, werd-play was nice n creative, it didnt lack much except for origionality, war is an obvious topic for anyone but for ure comment about topics, i'd say try n look into makin flows about topics not many or no-1 has done befor, well u could say that for every topic dropper but there ya go.......
holla........ |
dat was da shit man everything in dat was top notch
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