Afterword vs. Accomplishment
 

yo no more than 16 bars
handle yo buis
ill spit "Afterword"

Yo Dis Goes Out to My CLAS SIC Crew Holla

AIght

Speak-da-truth cuz my verses openin da keys-to-ur-lose, punches bustin ya like series of Bruce-lee-moves...
After Punches light him on fire just so i can be Heatin-his-bruise.../

Punches to ya face rearaingen got ya nose so big call you goofy...
dumb shit runnin at me wit a match cuz i told him to bring-da-heat-to-me.../

getcha verse but my lines inclined to get ya ass diverted...
ya scoopin "icecream" on yo rhymes cuz i said ya flow was "desserted".../

Rhymes-heatin not unusual to take this man its your ordinary-beatin...
Fist to Face-Meatin the "after"math of dis blast is more than just a "mild-readin".../

The way you lookin is unnatural, you backin fool as i bring this wrath-to-you...
Un-restrained you maintain a constan beatin, its inhumane how dis is da last-for-you

yo dats it drop yo verse

yo im not analyzin yo verse b/c theirs no need 4 me too

but i will post my shit in a minute, b/c im at work

brb

im back, just got a minute free from work
checkin in
ill post shortly

Check-it

Yo here I am, the accomplice to yur malicious murder
So reminisce on yur accomplishments b/c yur career is over

You have a better chance at,
Facing a cattle with cataracts/
Then defeating me in a battle rap
I’m like a gat, you can’t handle that! /

So save yur chitter-chat,
Stop commin weak like a female/
Yur flows lack facts, and detail
So im here to derail, yo train/

And watch as I prevail without pain,
B/c I’m slightly deranged in da brain
Yo whole image is dying to change
B/c u flow like turbulence on planes

But don’t worry accomplish-less
you will learn, in-due-time/
You should apply for Nextel,
By the way you Boost rhymes/

So we all know yur a biter, please stop this
All credit to yur ghost-writer
I know he writes hott shyt, but wen u drop it,
It’s sounds like nonsense
So the lyrics could’ve been fire, but u make em sound tired
And that is all you have accomplished

now can we get some votes
uppin
peace

lets get it poppin in this bizznatch
uppin
and ill peep out yo battle
just leave a link

yo uppin for votes on dis one right hurr i'll return da fave

Accomplishment Had Way Better Structure, Flow, Creativity, Punches, WordPlay & Vocab... So That's Why My Vote Is With accomplishment.. And "NO" This Is Not A "D/R Vote" ....!!! Just To Clear That Up

Afterword: Your Flow Was Hot, But You Had Lack Of Punches... And WordPlay Not To Mention Vocab!!! But Good Use Of Multies I Give That To You Playa

Vote: Accomplishment!!!!!!!

so.....heres the rundown

Flow:Afterword
Vocab:After
Multis:Accomplishment
Lyrics:After
Open:Accomplishment
Closer:Accomplishment
Wordplay:Accomplishment
Stucture:After

Since you both tie on fields of greatness I gotta give my vote to Afterword just cuz I could sit here and actually rap those lyrics and it sounded good!!

VOTE-AFTERWORD

yeah ok stillu ppin real votes yo

This shit is close.
Acclomplishment - Pros -Good meta4's, multies
Clever verse,
good opener and finisher
Cons - It didn't flow well
It seemed like separate section joined together
After - Pros - Good vocab
Good flow
Good links between punches
Cons - Puches weren't hitting hard as your opponant
They weren't as clever, multies not as good
Verdict - Afters sounded better to read but i've got to give it to accomplishment clearly for the clever punches.

Repay the favour. we all need votes.
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=117125

yo still upppin for votes thanx dawg

now first off to both thast shit wsas ill and the punches were great
but acompliss your shit ws great easy to flow and good punches say for afterwood now my vote goes to acompliss for bettewr punches

yo thanx for da votes man two more get it closed

Uppin For Votes Mane......................................