Dead Man's Keystyle (a morbid one)
 

As the hollwtips splatter brain fragments to dust/Dead men sing no songs but this dead muthafucka bust/from the day that I lay 6 deep in a grave/or when they found my remains in a darkened cave/I crave and desire to feel life and mix/at the river styx I was bound to tha crucifix/I sing this sad song all day everyday/where I lay can't move just stay in this dark grave/rottin my muthafuckin skin to the bone/ I'm all alone and the only thing I want is home/you bust chrome to my dome but the flow goes on/Because i don't stop can't stop keepin' with the struggle/i want revenge for my death like a battle rebuttle/theres so much left to feel so much left to explore/Soul fell too hell in 2004/ fuck it I guess I'm just dead!!

This was a decent drop.. Point was well crossed out.. Your rhymin stayed on target.. Try to work on ya structure a bit bro.. But Nice drop. Overall an 7/10.. Keep Spittin dawg.. holla.. 1

the strutcher wasnt great but good rhyme scheeme........

overall good shit......

one love.....

good rhyme
dont write in paragraph form
try to expand vocab a lil

that was great rhyming.
alright form.
keep doin what your doin.