raw talent vs L.I.
 

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ight lets do this shyt u spit it n ill follow up holla at me im chekin in

checkin in........nah i said u spit first in the rules........i aint gonna feed so there aint nothin to worry bout.......

dawg u think u can fuk wit dis shyt come get it
after im done spittin ill have u throwin a fit
i keep my shyt for real n at a steady pace
come on ill take u to r kelly n he can have his way wit ur face
dawg u challengin me u must be blazin
ill rip u up worst then freddy would do jason
i garuntee that record wont stay 11 and three
cuz ur fukin wit a man that u jus cant be
a king of this shyt and u dont wanna admit it
now heres a lil gift
a loss in ur column from this lyrically insane shit

My Verse
 

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Boy calls himself raw talent...well your now getting cooked...
Never make it on this site, cause all dope emcee spots r booked...
Like Halle Berry in Gothika, im makin this cat go mentally insane...
Think im only using you for practice, could say to keep entertained...
Handing him losses like i was a dealer at a casino...
House odds, your chances of winning, haha ZERO...
Goin gainst a vet, thinkin he'll win and gain lots of respect...
Cant win throwing punches like a true newbie, indirect...
See i dont like my meat raw, id rather have it burnt to a crisp...
Bust ya lip so fuckin hard, leave your speakin permanantly wit a lisp...

Just a lil sumtin sumtin to beat him.....

Yo chekc dis

Raw Talent <<<<..Notta Understatement but dawg you can elevate...verse was not that good somewhat of flow you got structre down punches and personals the ones that were there were played like whoa...but still you didnt do to bad for a newb...I mean ur finisher was ur best personal and it was kinda week...3/10

L.I. plz..Good punches...halle barrey one was kinda stupid yet made me laugh...the newb throwin punches was aight too...but yo i know you coulda dusted him...easy flow was aight struc was aight ....7/10

VOTE L.I.

Raw talent- okay this is honest voting here. your flow was satisfactory, structure is okay...but u had no punches. and your vocabulary was weak. what u need to do is come up with multies and punches and wordplay. yours was pretty basic so elevate seriously

L.I. - its obvious you are the victor in this situation. flow was a little off in some place and it was a little confusing to read cause of the bold text u used on some words. okay your vocab was fair. you had punches but they werent hitting but it was a little something to beat him. There is no need for bold text so everyone can see your punches thats real distracting. but what u need to do is use multies and a little bit of more personals. but overall solid verse. good.

thanks for the feedback and advice............uppp

dawg u think u can fuk wit dis shyt come get it
after im done spittin ill have u throwin a fit
boring...
i keep my shyt for real n at a steady pace
come on ill take u to r kelly n he can have his way wit ur face
boring...
dawg u challengin me u must be blazin
ill rip u up worst then freddy would do jason
boring...
i garuntee that record wont stay 11 and three
cuz ur fukin wit a man that u jus cant be
ok finally you come at him with a punch.. but this could mean his record gonna be 12-3.. gotta go somewhere with that
a king of this shyt and u dont wanna admit it
now heres a lil gift
a loss in ur column from this lyrically insane shit
yeah... ok...

overall man you just need to elevate... you opened just boring, overused stuff. work on coming straight at him with punches, get creative with multis, worldplay, stuff like that.

"Boy calls himself raw talent...well your now getting cooked...
Never make it on this site, cause all dope emcee spots r booked..."

that one line took the battle, could have stopped reading there.

v/ LI

hit my battle back v phat mic or LE... crew battles now i guess so i know it'll be honest vote
:thumbup:

thanx for the honesty........ ill be sure to step up the game n elevate holla at ya boy.......
<<<Raw Talent>>>>.

A'ight...breakdown...

Raw Talent...well...like Daclassic said, your flow was pretty good...Ryhme scheme was a lil' messed up...work on that...punches...need them...had some but were not that good...(no hate)...just elevate dawg, and you may become pretty good...but this verse was just too boring...

2/10

L.I...Nice verse...dope punches...flow...the works...you could have came soft with this kid, but you gave it your all...nice, dawg...shit about Gothika was ill...nice verse...

8/10

Vote- L.I.

No hate...hit this up plz...

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Thx...

Raw Talent-You had a nice rymes but u also had a whole buch of bacd punches and lines. C'mon, I'll take you to R Kelly and let him have his way with ur face. lame.

L.I-
Dope lines you had better rhymes than this man to.

Vote-L.I