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Shady_Genius 04-11-04 06:27 PM

C_R_E_A_M vs. Shady_Genius
 
Aight i guess i'll spit first again... here we go:

Time to shatter the dream//of this wack mc by the name of Cream//i'm a hit him where it hurts//put him in a hearse//yeah i know this shit sounds like it was rehearsed//but its not, its my gift and your curse//but wait, theres more this shit gets worse//First//i got that sick flow making mc's cough see//second, your name is something that i put in my coffee//It hurts me//to see//that i'm a have to cream such a wack mc//so easily//your rhymes is weak to me//i do this effortlessly//you just a wack ass lame//probably lookin for ways how you can attack my name//you gotta stop spitting the same old shit, the fans are geting bored//better yet just choke your self withthe keyboard chord//cuz you and me both kow who they voting for//the only way you winning this is if you break my keyboard//you have no idea for what the fuck is in stored//i'm a hit you so hard in the back of ya//that they gonna have to peel you off the wall with a spatular//my flow so spectacular//you couldn't understand this shit if i spit it in your vernacular//and lastly, C_R_E_A_M stands for Cash Rules Everything Around Me//not Cocksucking Rookie getting Eating by All Mc's..

B_Loco 04-11-04 11:07 PM

ok i see u dawgie....

im getin a visual...
the outcome of this battle is predictable...
after i spit to this prick,he'll be like spirits...invisible...
my rap form is criticle...
nuthin but truth i spit,writen like somethin biblical...
im here ta draw a hand full of spades....
ta win,or i'll just surround him in barz ta watch him try ta conquer the maze...
my rhymes the darkess...so im the only one casting a shade...
im whipN this slave,he's bein a hard head...
so i'll kill u then cover u in cement so u can really be hard dead...
my verbal tactics cause chain reactions like atoms...
ya played flows,i blazed those kuz when i was a preteen i been had em...
u'll be Quiet in the dark when i have u concealed...
torturen ya frame for da game while wiren ya grill....
im evil,and my terror is something u should dodge...
plus imma pimp,my dick is something ya momz should slob...
your no threat ta any emcee...
dont envy me...
or i'll send goons ta run up on u and empty three...

streetsweepa 04-11-04 11:47 PM

shady genius won but you both were sweet but you gotta pick a winner !

Willa 04-12-04 12:16 AM

vocab cream
personals shady
punches cream
opener cream barely
closer shady

shady work on vocab and punches
cream work on vocab
good battle i was feelin cream better overall so im gonna vote 4 gream good verses from both though

E Looch 04-12-04 12:48 AM

cream had a better opener and better vocab tryna spit so people dont know wtf u talkin about or wha lol naw but had some good punchs just woulda been a better verse wit more personals
best lines
im here ta draw a hand full of spades....
ta win,or i'll just surround him in barz ta watch him try ta conquer the maze...

shady had an ok opener some punchs but u had better personals just need to work on that structure an make it easier to read and u had a better closer
best lines
and lastly, C_R_E_A_M stands for Cash Rules Everything Around Me//not Cocksucking Rookie getting Eating by All Mc's..

vote cream

hit my shit up with an honest vote

Shady_Genius 04-13-04 02:33 AM

uppin for votes............................................. .................................................. .................

MisterE21 04-13-04 02:50 AM

A'ight, both verses had flow problems, in my opinion. Each had moments when the flow really worked and both had moments when it was horrifically forced. Overall, I think CREAM took the flow points....

In Shady's verse, I felt the lines "cuz you and me both kow who they voting for//the only way you winning this is if you break my keyboard" and the killer closer "and lastly, C_R_E_A_M stands for Cash Rules Everything Around Me//not Cocksucking Rookie getting Eating by All Mc's.." By far the best line in the battle and an excellent spot to stop on. But, on the other side of the coin, "First//i got that sick flow making mc's cough see//second, your name is something that i put in my coffee" is really really forced to me. Sounds, to me, like you came up with the line about coffee and couldn't think of shit to rhyme it with...I can understand that when the punch is really really sick...but the coffee line is, in my opinion, mediocre at best and not worth the weak couplet.

In CREAMs verse, I was feeling the lines "im getin a visual...the outcome of this battle is predictable...after i spit to this prick,he'll be like spirits...invisible...my rap form is criticle...nuthin but truth i spit,writen like somethin biblical" which flows really well, has some clever wordplay and is overall just tight. "my verbal tactics cause chain reactions like atoms...ya played flows,i blazed those kuz when i was a preteen i been had em..." Here, the lines are nice, but the rhythm is very tight. On the other hand,
"im whipN this slave,he's bein a hard head...so i'll kill u then cover u in cement so u can really be hard dead..." throws the flow off a bit and, realistically, just doesn't hit all that hard...not even sure it makes any fuckin' sense. ::grin::

Both rhymes were a'ight, I think CREAM came a little harder and with a few better lines so I gotta give it to him. I'd say work on better punches (they gotta HIT, go for that "Ohhhhhhhhhhhh SHIT factor"); I always look for lines when I'd say "god damn, I wish I'd a thought of that" and I didn't see much of that here.

Peace, E

Concrete 04-13-04 04:23 AM

Alright both of these emcees had basic rhymes...here I'll break it down..

Shady-Had bountiful multies, I won't doubt that, but they were mostly all forced, you also had a couple of punches in there, too.

CREAM-Had more intellectual lines, also had more wordplay punches.

Punches-CREAM, he had intelligent lines that really...'outsmarted' Shady.
Multies-Obviously Shady took this, he HAD ALOT of multies in his verse, so he takes this catergory.
Vocabulary-CREAM took this catergory, had more vocab, while Shady only concentrated on multies.
Metaphors-None, didn't spot any metas in any of the verses, maybe there was some, but I didn't see.
Flow/Structure-CREAM took this, Shady's flow and structure was all confusing and very hard to read.
Humor/Creativity-Shady, he made fun of Cream's name with creativity, so Shady takes this catergory.
Vote-Cream, he had punches and strucuture which really took the W.

Oh and if you have any time, try to peep my flow in Open Mic, Industry Diss

Shady_Genius 04-13-04 10:24 AM

why am i n ot surprised that everyone chooses to vote against me... fucking bullshit

adamtomo 04-14-04 09:30 AM

yo shady genius battle me!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1111 :thefinger

Crossword 04-18-04 02:00 PM

hah shady. quit ya bitchin and listen to them, they aint hatin.

Cream was the intellect of the battle. Both flows were off to me, but shadys was a little more choppy. Shady work on your punches, and though not a big thing work on structure too. It makes it look better and an easier read which will make your flow seem better.

V/ Cream

Crossword 04-18-04 02:00 PM

Return the favor, Hit up the battle in my siggy with an honest opinion


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