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Now that I escape sleep walker awake
those who covalate knows the world aint cake
Jails bars ain't golden gates
those who fake they brake when they meet they four hundred pound mate
if i could rule the world, everyone in da ghetto would hav a gun of course
for when dem gangs try ta use force
Den ya'll can gitty up on ya horse
I kick a rhyme while drinking moon shine
I poor sip on the concrete, for the deceased
but no don't weep, dey in a state of sleep
thinking about the robbery that I did last week
Money in the bag, banka look like a drag
I wanna play with pelicans from here to Bagdad
Gun blast, think fast I think I'm hit
My girl pinch's my hips to see if I still exist
I think not, I send a letter to my friends
A born again, hooligan only to be king again

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