wildFire vs. spitfire-+
 

10-30 bars
no dickridn
no hate votes
spit first drop in 20 minutes or less

he naw i agreed if u spit 1st that i would battle u

are you illterate? my post said that you spit first....if you didn't wanna spit first..you shouldn't of responded...simple as that

whatever man...'ll go first...it doesn't matter at all

Lookin in bitchslapped i see this guy never wanna go first..
he's worried he can't win without flippin the verse..

I don't blame the kid cuase he spits straight garbage...
almost like he was eatin from 3rd world trash barges...

I'll leave smacked blued, black and brusied with a limp...
you couldn't beat me if my name was tattooed on ya dick...

i could rhyme a word to you but i refuse to do so..
i'm searching for his purpose like i'm robinson carusoe..

why the fuck you usin a name you know doesn't fit you
you don't spit fire you barely spit sparks and thats after i hit you

when you respond you better make your verse as long as posisble
you lack quality you need quantity to attempt clearin this obstacle

the obstcale bein my verse and none other
you couldn't cum sick if you fucked your dead mother

damn wildfire...that verse was sick.............................he should just forfeit

i know...i feel like i just waisted some decent work that could potentially win some battl;es against decent emcees...on this nobody...

ok fuck it im getting tired of u bytches\\cutcha heads off an leave it in da kitchen\\
let chu bleed , slam ur remains in a river to rot\2 months lata yah neva found, soon tha police see yah floatin bye u stop\\i pause 4 a loud ass thump of my fist against yah spinal cord\\as i twist it out an dig threw the meat wit my chainsaw\\ it'll be just like a car reck\\wasting the ambulaces gas 4 last yah breath \\u a surprise in da box dat comes out real strong\\when i spring u open i shoot"cha to da instrumental of my song\\i chopp the rest of yah body parts up an put"em in a bagg\\beside chu jpoll in a ragg\\this is sick to much blood an murder\\to days of hidin tha evedience sum tha cops neva herd of//im quick to tell yah imma letchu know// if this is an easy win den this .com is a dirrty hoe//my introduction to yah death as the cop question to were u last left// i said i dunno it was 1 pm in da afta noon soon u dissappeared i neva would have guest//im da final an second in line\\betta my back im am the key witness to a murder crime// stinky breath bitch..........they"ll neva know where i putta far away in eastern canada in a ditch// u an"t no wildfire//barley a mild fire//no question about imma killa 4 higher//u well on da otha hand had bad life//it all start bad when u mad me mad, an i pulled out tha knife//..........then well sumbody had to die right\\

lol...uppin for votes.............................

uppin...............................dem votes......................

uppin dem votes

Alright, this was no contest, simple and plain. Two "fires" but only one is hot...Vote goes to WildFire...

WildFire:
Lookin in bitchslapped i see this guy never wanna go first..
he's worried he can't win without flippin the verse..
Not as strong as I'd like to see for an opener, but obviously true...

I don't blame the kid cuase he spits straight garbage...
almost like he was eatin from 3rd world trash barges...
LOL...clever, nice wordplay

I'll leave smacked blued, black and brusied with a limp...
you couldn't beat me if my name was tattooed on ya dick...
The setup wasn't great, but it was little hard to understand...the punch though...good shit...

i could rhyme a word to you but i refuse to do so..
i'm searching for his purpose like i'm robinson carusoe..
Eh...wasn't feeling it, dunno why....

why the fuck you usin a name you know doesn't fit you
you don't spit fire you barely spit sparks and thats after i hit you
Flow got fucked up a bit on the punch n' the punch wasn't strong enough to justify it...

when you respond you better make your verse as long as posisble
you lack quality you need quantity to attempt clearin this obstacle
Really dug this line...not super hard...not super clever...just sounds good in my head and made me smile...

the obstcale bein my verse and none other
you couldn't cum sick if you fucked your dead mother
I like the punch, though I still think mamma shit is played...the setup was a little weak and patronizing to me (cuz I knew what you meant with the explanation) but that last line is a good closer.

Wild: Overall, good verse. Flows nice, reads well. Good punches...personals are there, not too much, but got 'em good in the intro. I can feel giving up a little flow for a clever punch...but make sure the punch is really worth it...

::sigh:: in the essence of being evenhanded...

SpitFire:
ok fuck it im getting tired of u bytches\\cutcha heads off an leave it in da kitchen\\
Wack, played...would be filler in the middle of verse, just shitty at the start...

let chu bleed , slam ur remains in a river to rot\2 months lata yah neva found, soon tha police see yah floatin bye u stop\\
Uh...whatever...wack...NO flow at all, WAY too many syllables in the second line...

i pause 4 a loud ass thump of my fist against yah spinal cord\\as i twist it out an dig threw the meat wit my chainsaw\\
Cord and Saw don't really rhyme...

it'll be just like a car reck\\wasting the ambulaces gas 4 last yah breath
I'm going to assume you meant "4 yah last breath"...

\\u a surprise in da box dat comes out real strong\\when i spring u open i shoot"cha to da instrumental of my song\\
Is that first line a punch or a compliment? Confusing

i chopp the rest of yah body parts up an put"em in a bagg\\beside chu jpoll in a ragg\\
This time, the FIRST line has too many syllables...there is NO consistent rhythm in this whole verselll

this is sick to much blood an murder\\to days of hidin tha evedience sum tha cops neva herd of//im quick to tell yah imma letchu know// if this is an easy win den this .com is a dirrty hoe//my introduction to yah death as the cop question to were u last left// i said i dunno it was 1 pm in da afta noon soon u dissappeared i neva would have guest//im da final an second in line\\betta my back im am the key witness to a murder crime// stinky breath bitch..........they"ll neva know where i putta far away in eastern canada in a ditch// u an"t no wildfire//barley a mild fire//no question about imma killa 4 higher//u well on da otha hand had bad life//it all start bad when u mad me mad, an i pulled out tha knife//..........then well sumbody had to die right\\
I give up...I can't go line for line for the rest of this verse...

I'm not hating in anyway...but, Spit, you were just outgunned. You need to work on your structure because that shit is nearly impossible to read...if you refuse to break it into bars, at LEAST use the same direction slashes. You're rhythm is allllll over the place, the killer/nasty/chainsaw massacre style has been done to death (no pun intended), there was NO evident word play and no strong punches...Lots of room to improve...

Gotta go to Wild...

aight thanks for the feedback and the vote E......uppin to close this battle...

okay wild fire, that verse was pretty hot, good punchlines and decent personals a few quotables in your verse

spitfire, i liked your verse too, you had good punches and flow decent structure and okay metaphores

i think wild fires structrure was better
i think wild fires punchlines were better
i think wild fires metaphors was better
i think spit fires imagery was better
i think spit fires flow was much better'

wild your verse seemed to forced, but you got my vote

uppin for votes.........................................