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M.F.P 04-14-04 05:17 PM

Denver Max vs. M.F.P
 
15 lines max
no d/r votes
no crew votes


here now jus copy and paste ur verse to here

M.F.P 04-14-04 05:22 PM

no changing it either leave it the same as it was....

Denver Max 04-14-04 05:31 PM

M.F.P.? you've got P.M.S
cooking and cleaning in your sisters dress.
running around looking for a dick to jump on
trying to figure out how to work a tampon.
i'm just kidding, i didn't mean any of that
but i bet you're just like wildfire, you're fat.
i'm a rhyming machine like that cat in the hat
as a matter of fact, i've got a big striped hat.
like a potato with a penis, i'm a dictator
that's a pun, it's funny, get the check from the waiter.

M.F.P 04-14-04 05:36 PM

ur right about 1 thing ur a fucking cat...
and wat kind of rap was that.....
ur runnin around, tryin to find ur mind....
then start yellin cuz u forgot u have none.....
ur askin ur self wen is this gonna be done.......
and ur momma says its jus begun....
u may be the dictator but i'm the exterminator....
come bak to my restaurant wen u've gathered ur skillz....
and be ready to pay those bills...

JPoll 04-14-04 05:41 PM

yo this battle was pretty one sided....i mean denver is original as helll...and funny...and it all flow illy well!
M.F.P.? you've got P.M.S
cooking and cleaning in your sisters dress

haha tight opener 10/10

like a potato with a penis, i'm a dictator
that's a pun, it's funny, get the check from the waiter.
funniest closer i'v ever heard....haha... 10/10

and to mfp
pretty good cept for most where fillers
like wtf was this line...

ur askin ur self wen is this gonna be done.......
and ur momma says its jus begun....???????

such a filler dog


vote denver

PoLiFicK 04-14-04 06:36 PM

imma go wit vocab both of yall had good struture but yall flow was off and no punches nuttin that caught my eye no hate but yall got 2 elavate

punches-neitha
struture-both
vocab-mfp
flow-mfp
begin-max
end-mfp
winner-mfp
by flow and wordplay it want da best but enuff 2 pull of dis 1

Jug. 04-14-04 07:15 PM

Choppa City Is Right

None ya have dope punches
structure imma go with mfp, more organized
vocab is mfp, denver had none what so ever
flow- mfp flowed better
opener- none, denver, that was whack opener, u too mfp
closer- mfp by a long shot
vote- mfp

cant fuck wit it.

franchiZe 04-14-04 07:24 PM

Good overall from both playas.
M.F.P lacked flow and his lines were 2 short
his punches were not all that good although he had a little originality in there.
Denver once again displayed good skills
he threw some good punches and his flow and structure was average
the one pointer wud be to drop the fat jokes cuz u have played them out now.

Denver gets my vote.
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Shadows edge 04-14-04 07:27 PM

yo Jpoll, you starting to border on dick riding. i know Denver's shit is original, but that doesn't mean you have to vote for him. check it, this is a battle forum, not a open mic forum.

Truth_ 04-14-04 08:42 PM

both verses wher really weak but i vote farely but Max took this thats all igot to say
onthis battle

K-Dub 04-14-04 09:27 PM

Vote - mfp

Mfp better verses flowed better

liked it more

MisterE21 04-14-04 09:47 PM

Nod to Denver Max

Denver:
M.F.P.? you've got P.M.S
cooking and cleaning in your sisters dress.

Not a bad opener; not earthshaking, but mildly amusing...

running around looking for a dick to jump on
trying to figure out how to work a tampon.

Again, mildly amusing but nothing spectacular...

i'm just kidding, i didn't mean any of that
but i bet you're just like wildfire, you're fat.
i'm a rhyming machine like that cat in the hat
as a matter of fact, i've got a big striped hat.

:banghead:
First, agree with Franchize, that fat shit is old (it was old before you brought it up in two different battles...it's a lot older now)...weak rhymes, and rhyming hat twice? There are countless words that rhyme with "hat," but instead of using one of them, you say "I've got a big striped hat"?
:banghead:

like a potato with a penis, i'm a dictator
that's a pun, it's funny, get the check from the waiter.

Good closer...best line in the battle, in my opinion. Dick-tater...clever...

Overall: Slightly above average verse before it got to "that, fat, hat, hat" shit. You've obviously got the ability to be clever and funny...just polish it up a bit...

MFP:

ur right about 1 thing ur a fucking cat...
and wat kind of rap was that.....

Weak opener...Didn't say anything...

ur runnin around, tryin to find ur mind....

I assume the attempt here was to rhyme "find" with "mind" and call it a line...didn't work....

then start yellin cuz u forgot u have none.....
ur askin ur self wen is this gonna be done.......
and ur momma says its jus begun....

Umm...Maybe I dont' get it...but...no, for certain...I don't get it...wtf?

u may be the dictator but i'm the exterminator....

It worked a little better this time, but in overall flow this fucks up you rhythmn...

come bak to my restaurant wen u've gathered ur skillz....
and be ready to pay those bills...

CLoser was the best line of the verse, but that's not saying much...way off on flow, leaves the rhyme feeling incomplete...

Overall: I've got a feeling you could much better; this verse just had nothing to it. Kind of like just going through the motions....Flow was way off, work on that...

Nod to Denver Max

streetsweepa 04-14-04 10:46 PM

well break down ::::::::::::::
DENVER flow 3/10
rymes 5/10
punches 1/10
best line:M.F.P.? you've got P.M.S
cooking and cleaning in your sisters dress.

mfp:::
flow 4/10
rymes 6/10
punches 3/10
best line:come bak to my restaurant wen u've gathered ur skillz....
and be ready to pay those bills... that was a good closer

Yung Duke 04-14-04 10:48 PM

Yea I'ma have to give it to MFP. neither flow was nothin to get exited over but he had a better style then Denver Max.I say style because thats the only thing thats different between them. And how the hell did that dumb ass nigga give Denver Max 10/10. He sucks. But My vote is MFP

Restricted 04-14-04 10:48 PM

Aight Check It...

Both Of Your Spits Were Really Weak...This Must Be A Newb Battle...Umm....I Don't Know..Neither Of You Had Punches, and No Mulits, Metaphors, or Word Usuage. Denver's Flow Was Off Mad, but MFP Only Had Flow Cause His Shit Was Short.

Denver Was More Into A Open Mic Verse, Like Shawdows Edge Said, While MFP Was Into Elementary Rapping...LoL...Newayz...My Vote Goes To MFP For Actually Battle Spit and For Flow.

Vote - MFP

~R~


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