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streetsweepa vrs. Black Thief
yo..
10 line minumum no max line u spit and ill be back on at 9 cuz i have to go to work in like 5 minutes so spit first Black Thief and ill spit later no d/r no prewritten shit verses are due by 12 tonight ......goodluck streetsweepa = $$$tim$$$. Both DQ'ed and banned for cheating -Cprogress |
aiight off top I'm goin for ya heart
tryin to defeat me is like a shot in tha dark "Streetsweepa?" come on lets get serious..... Leave ya body bloody like a fat bitches period come at me u want it u can get it U envy my skills....they stay on ya head like a fitted Please believe ya name aint nuthin but lies We all know Mexicans just carry around knives.... On break tryin to spit hard.... ya whole fam next door doin my neighbor's yard I bet ya think ya shit look pretty when u think Bet ya think ya shit looks pretty in ink To tell u tha truth dawg....ya shit looks pretty extinct my words are razor shop...I'm reckless Have niggas thinkin you rockin a ruby red necklace as I cut a smile under ya throat watch ya choke have ya in tha river watchin ya float shoot out one ya legs....now u only got a crutch to lean on split ya skull....have ya head lookin like a fuckin Klingon |
oh yeah and I see u still online so fuck by midnight...u real bout yours...post by 11:30
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yo i left my computer on dont say syt u dont kno about
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yo yo check,
u talk alotta shit u must think u gonna win// i beat white-ice's ass and ur the next of kin// its u that ill slay ur the one ill kill// what u bitch haha i dont envy ur skill// u love wood so much we call u "tha human mill"// all we here from u is shyt like fiddle faddlle// i already won but im gonna stretch the b-a-t-t-l-e// i think maybe im to much for u to handle// i got more vocab like i juts beat u in scrabble// keeep tlkin ur shyt like about cutting my neck// bitch u kno ull get wrecked// yea im mexican so lay down and have respect// ur punches are like a capgun,in-no-way do they effect// i won this battle so u can already cut my check// i kno about ur girl, walkin round lookin like shes shrek// your rymes are old no where near "hight tek"// from a little bitch like u what can people expect?// u aint scary, u act like u straight from hell// the truth is that from this ryme u cant rebel// ur shyt is weak and ur a bitch if u cant tell// i crushed your back with my lyrical ryme// but imma keep going till i crush your spine// u think your a gangster so ill be like barky and take a bite out crime// ur balls havnt even dropped yet how old are u kid? nine?// |
"Streetsweepa?" come on lets get serious.....
Leave ya body bloody like a fat bitches period ok ^^Black Thief that line was a good punch but try to explain your punches with less wordin,an spit on some multis to your verses thats all u need to knock oponents harder remember multis are important..for example heres a punch line with less wordin and mad multis ------- =Pain? It Attaches To The Flow That Dispatchs With The Savage Of Ten-Hatches Testicle-Crush-Tactics In Best-Of-Blood-Matchs... feelin me... overall your verse came ok but work on wat iam teelin you... just trying to set and example for u but master that your verses will come much better an more complex u had some good an punches thou let me xplain the wordin part as I cut a smile under ya throat watch ya choke have ya in tha river watchin ya float shoot out one ya legs....now u only got a crutch to lean on have less wordin?n strong multis so people feel your shit more an vocab also for example= Un-destroeable like my thesis,storms to crush corpses-interposing-deadly liquids- In-intoxication-through-yal veins-all yal-cells-parish-like contaminated rivers-yal-livers-die-With no suply-to-aplly fresh-water-continuing this internal-sizing-of my lyrical sickness- u feeling the multis ok try to work on that it was some hustle for me when i was startin but youll mastere that- as for street sweepa basicly this goes to both add more vocab an make that shit rhyme dont just throw in vocab in it will look ridiculous.try to make hard punches with less wording and more vocab as in with rhymes watch in to it an make it flow for example street sweepa u had some really weak lines i won this battle so u can already cut my check// i kno about ur girl, walkin round lookin like shes shrek// ok this was really weak try to come harder for real.most of this u was saying u got the battle won an shit try to come or practice on something like this just giving u an example.. I'm winnin in this battle, astonishin' the board, makin 'em cuss! Like the su-per-bowl, co-mmer-cial, soap in the mouth, afta hearin ya fuss! Cuz, ya rhymes is played, out like re-runs, of chips and Hawaii! Ya ended, Yeah this battle is over, by defualt don't tell me I already now(know, now=won rewound)feelin me..... Vote=Black Thief ok only reason my vote goes to Black Thief cuz he came shorter with less wordin of his puches an lines and a bit harder but rember it aint about clownin oponents talking about some ones girl u have to make people feel the strong sick punches....peace also those water gun lines never use them there played out and really weak. |
YO TRUTH u kno what ur talkin about but i disagree.
all black theif talked about is killing him he really didnt have enough punches or personels yea:i kno about ur girl, walkin round lookin like shes shrek// your rymes are old no where near "hight tek"// from a little bitch like u what can people expect?/ thats called a personel and i feel there essential to each victory STREET u did better before this wasnt the best ive seen outa u but u won u had better punches and PERSONELS. your shyt was wack though lol i wanna rematch u set it up and will do it ill kill u dis tyme good battle i give you both props street ur best section was:all we here from u is shyt like fiddle faddlle// i already won but im gonna stretch the b-a-t-t-l-e// i think maybe im to much for u to handle// i got more vocab like i juts beat u in scrabble// |
no iam saying black had good punches in that way
cuz STREET had some corny shit going on feel me... ? where u at Franchise i wanna kill your ass to the smuther of defeat bitch post the battle up.. |
Aight check it.
street, I wasn't digging your flow or structure at all. It's kinda clumpy when you got different number of lines in each mini verse, and your got no multis within the lines to help out the flow. Also, your rhymes were kinad weak in pleaces. What I would do is take some of those multiple rhymes you got and put them into one line, make it flow nicer and adds a little spice to your verse. Also gotta work on your punches man, I saw too few. You mostly talking about how good you are, but nothing was too creative and you only had like 2 direct punches. See check this: " I bet ya think ya shit look pretty when u think Bet ya think ya shit looks pretty in ink To tell u tha truth dawg....ya shit looks pretty extinct" That's nice wordlplay, the flow is awesome the way you use repetition there, it has decent punch also. Best couple lines in the battle I think." Theif, you gotta get more consistent though, some of your flow was off in places, and a bunch of your punches were weak. Your opener was played, and your closer was a little weak. Both y'all got potential but need to elevate. Hit back my battle against East Miles (link in sig). |
Streetsweepa?" come on lets get serious.....
Leave ya body bloody like a fat bitches period you had some decent punches black thief...but that one was the funniest/best in my oppinion....your flow was pretty good..nothin was too crammed...but a couple lines i read....the bars in the couplets didn't match up...so it took away from your flow...you didn't have any metas..no multies...and not many personals..PLUS....your rhyme kinda had that whole gangsta scene in it..maybe it was just me...but i'm not into that kinda stuff....now onto street sweeper what u bitch haha i dont envy ur skill// u love wood so much we call u "tha human mill"// wasn't feelin that line at all street...to be honest...i wasn't feelin most of your verse...your punches wern't that great...but, you came with more personals, regardless of how good they were....so thats gonna win me over...this was kind of a weak battle..i agree...both of you need to elevate..you got madd potential..cause the flow is there...you just need to step out a little bit...my vote goes to sweepa |
a yo wild fire can u vote on my battle vs phat mic
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Ok here's the breakdown...Black theif had one strong punch in his verse an that was it the rest was weak..but I agree with everyone else this is sick...
Streetsweepa?" come on lets get serious..... Leave ya body bloody like a fat bitches period Noow street, you didn't have one punch as strong as that but you had good personals an decent wordplay, an better word usage, so I think ya verse was a little better Punches: Black Personals: Street Flow: Black Structure: Street Vocab: Street Wordplay: street Vote: Street |
yo Street sweepa
Style 8/10 rhymes 9/10 Structure 7/10 Black theif Style 7/10 Rhymes 6/10 Structure 8/10 so whos my vote check the status and u kno iight well streetsweepa came at him wit a good enough flow Black theif u had to many words till the rhymes came up but its all good i liked both of ya rhymes but im goin Streetsweepa :vote: Street |
aight..this was still a weak battle
punch:street multi:same thought into it:street hey..streets spit was okay...but u could do better...but theif jsut sucked...thats all i got ta say..so just try to build up in ur punches and ur multis cuz it waz boring..u gotta entertain us also |
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