franchiZe vs. creativitie
 

yo i'm gonna set that rules

30 mins max 4 tha spit
30 lines max.
15 lines min.

no d/r
no hate
no crew

u choose who spits first!!

thats kinda long just keep that shit regular.....10-15......aight.....not my check in

you spit first...........no prewritten.....if its prewritten im not even goint to drop

yo i'll spit first then
here are tha new rules
10 mins max 4 tha spit
10-15 lines max
no prewritten
no d/r
no hate
no crew

i'll start when u check in

10 mins...thats it...i just got out of a battle....make it 20..aight....

20 it is then
i'm gonna spit now

aight i will spit rite afta you.............................

check this shit 4 tha pure sick spit..................

I'm gonna start with some personals, so listen up creaTivitie//
fool ure only 15 still prayin for some fuckin sexual activity//
my name may not be jack but i did fuck jill on tha hill//
and i got tha bitch pregnant even tho she's on tha pill//
check ure name and where ure from, its clear u can't spell//
this is a mans game, u need to go back to show 'n' tell//
u think ure ready for me Mr. tuffa than african feet//
ure the student, i'm the teacher and i'm givin u an incomplete//
ure called creaTivitie so ure spit betta be creative//
or i'll split ure cranium leavin u permanently vegetative.//

I’m the real high roller, this bitch is da low achiever//
I’ll rip out ya weak soul cuz I’m Raziel the soul reaver// (from tha game)
With a diamond edge cut I’ll leave u headless with a meat cleaver//
I cud spit multis non-stop makin even u a true believer//
Just so u can hear me I’ll go live via satellite receiver//
I’m gonna infect u like a tick fillin u wit tha texas fever.//

yeh i did go one line over tha top but who cares
just spit ure shit creaTivitie

aight here i go.................check in...........

hold up not a check in..........my bad....got a pm..........

aight here we go agian...sorry kids need to stop pm me...every time im bout to battle......

fuckin ak mixa wont stop pm me......damn..im just goin to spit...fuck him....

this herb sghould have neva fucked wit class sic.....you jst permitted your lost...

dis kids new 2 da game,battled me gues he dont care if he take a fall//
franchise your skippin steps, tryn to walk before you can crawl//
tryn to correct my grammer, now watch the teacher get taught//
grammer dont me shyte,your an herb so who cares wat you thought//
look i a ill rymer who already elevated in this rymin franchise//
its like im eminem and and your seein shit thru stans-eyes//
kid if you battled any body in my crew you would get Massacre//
look if your skills multiplied, then multiple loses would occure//
i bag and smoke herbs like u daily,fuck franchize should call you reefer//
look i just smoked this franchize herb, now im the HI achiever//

Hmm.. very tight battle. Creative.. I expected more.. you've been slacking lateley I think. The first line was pretty nice, but the flow wasn't great (too long). the second bar was just kinda weak, the second line especially could have been better. the third bar was definetely nice, also a good rhyme. the massacre line was nice, but then the next line was worded kinda poorly. the closer is kinda played, but still pretty decent.

franchiZe: yo, much better than the verse you spit against me. your first four lines were still really weak, just filler, not really much of a personal man. your next couple bars were pretty nice, but the last bar of that first part was really nice, i think your best one. very nice rhyme. your next 3 bars all flowed nicely, and you had good vocab throughout, but i didnt really see any nice punches. so basically, get a couple more multis, but work on da punches. you got too much filler, and too much "i'ma kill you" stuff, which is good but you have to have some punches i think.

v/ creative but tight battle.

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