Sharkk Vs. Afterword
 

12 lines max
no feeding off first verse
gud luck
peace

hey man I'll drop an honest vote on this when its done, just hit up one of my battles.

yo After word id look at ya shit but u can click it

Yo, i just dropping this quick!!

Wit limbs flailing, any comment is wasted content/
Battling me?? your common “cents” must be “spent”/
You need words, after I leave your mind blurred/
Read my text, I guess my lines are just preferred/

You just O-and-eight, so I guess I owe-u-hate/
Almost 200 posts, and nothing to bring to the plate/
A “Flyweight” that doesn’t have skill for me/
I could post all periods (….) and still gain a victory/

Lucky to see 10 lines of text, I’m just letting ya/
If I dropped 12 lines, I’d just corrode your retina/

Post soon, i just keyed mine up yo!!

Yo, you posting soon!! (just wondering man, i thought this was a quick battle)!!

Yo
Check-it

Im not a NARC, but you will freeze like I FIGHT CRIMES
If yur a SHARK, it’s because you relentlessly BITE RHYMES
But don’t bite mine, because you are STALE like MOLD
I’m a killer WHALE, so stop nibbling as I eat you WHOLE
Hold up yung buck, I know you don’t want no PROBLEMS
You don’t wanna end up press’d to the floor like a THROTLE
My motto is money making, and ish kant stop-me
Your format is sloppy, and you got yur name watchin hockey
So watch me, im cocky, and I don’t obey laws
So I will kill u and place you on the wall like yur names JAWS
I demand-applaus wen on da mic
U like manly-broads especially dikes
So they can protect u wen afterword is around
But its too late cuz you are gonna be the first shark to drown.

peace

my bad
i told u i was at work
i just barely had time to spit real quik
uppin

1 question, your flow changed half way through, Y??

Ok.
 

This battle pretty much came down to Punches and Peronly's. I really didn't see any good Multi's from either of you. Sharkk, your structure was good and I liked how you came at him by hi loss streak, powerful personly. Afterwood, you had lots of punches and personly's, but they weren't as strong. Notice how Sharkk came at you in a personal way, you came at him too much about false statements but I saw some good personly's in there. Sharkk gets my vote because his Personly's were stronger and his punches hit harder. Afterwood, I felt like you could of won if you didn't rush your verse and spent more time on it cause I know you have the talant. Good Battle.
Sharkk=Vote.

i say SHarkk had bettah punches a poll for dem

SHarkk

Flow 9/10
rhymes 7/10
Structure 8/10
Punches 7/10
31/40

Afterword

Flow 7/10
Rhymes 8/10
Structure 6/10
Punches 7/10
28/40

Aight.. like oc6 said, this was a tight battle and basically came down to punches, and I think that Shark took it, I mean tight battle, but the bars I really liked from Shark were:

You just O-and-eight, so I guess I owe-u-hate/
Almost 200 posts, and nothing to bring to the plate/
A “Flyweight” that doesn’t have skill for me/
I could post all periods (….) and still gain a victory/

The open was pretty good and all, but these were your strongest lines, I wish you would have opened with that bar.. the close was also pretty tight too.

After, you had a nice opening and closing bar, the open was a nice personal sorta, the close was a nice wordplay on his name, sorta. Like oc6 said though, you gotta use facts about him... so you had his name going but then maybe check out his profile, location, shit like that.

Anyway, tight battle, Shark gets the vote.

come on yall
this cat didnt say much of anyhing 2 me
maybe im wrong but let me get some feedback
ill hit yurs leave a link
peace
uppin

yo homie imma have to be truthful on thisthis battle was tight both could of did better both could have elevated.shark ur personals were better and ur flow was better u also could of did better...no afterword this was probably one of ur weakest battles i personaly think u couold of did way better ur punches were ok they jus wasnt as personal like shark was but u did still do good both of u keep it up you'll both get better
vote=shark

my votes
 

shark rap was good and fast
he kicked some ass he jumpped
right into it flow was cools and
creativity

my vote sharkk