Iam The American Dream
 

coupla bars

Wherever u to scared to go nigga I been there//
With a grinned stare// dissolve into thin air//
Normal nigga on da out but a rebellious REBEL INSIDE//
Call me DAUNTE cuz even the DEVIL MAY CRY//
I’m back and STRAPPED with TACTICAL-STUFF-AGAIN//
And hence the name RAPS-RADICAL-RUFFIAN//
I am immortal nigga no WEAKNESS KNOWN TO MAN//
Got the world fallin down the never endin DEEPNESS IN MY HAND//
My palm is forever torn// strong as a leather thorn//
And this is juss the calm before the storm//
I am immortal, my blood has never been seen//
Never will be nigga, I’m the AMERICAN DREAM///////

yo gimme more feedback and leave ya link or the name of ur open mic and i'll give u some feedback also.

yo i need more feedback yall come on and drop ya links or titles i'll hit ya bak

yo i liked that verse, that really u who wrote, i give you mad props,

yo thank yall for the feedback but i need more........

Good Flow and would have been better if you contenued Cat...Expanded more...Keep dropin - Peace.

i want some more feedback holla back

nice references esp. the Dante line

um...flow was a lil choppy here or there

rhyming was coo...but woulda worked better with a better flow


not bad dawg


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yo lemme get more feedback yall holla at me

that was tight man

that shit was tight -props- maybe we could collab sometime hit me up

yo lemme get some more feedback yall come on