Premanition vs Creativitie
 

10 lines max
no feedin
no d/r votes
no hate votes
no crew votes

gud luk!

this battle already has a thread but its packed full of freeposts n creativitie hasn't spit yet so i've moved it ere, so my verse will be straight up in a min cos im jus movin it from the other thread!

about to beat my crew leader....clas-sic rumours ur leavin well who needs~ya...
see~ya got 21 wins?...well i got 21 questions to ask ya before i believe~ya...
the limelight don't seem to like creativitie...played the sheep in his school nativity...
u hear ya own voice big ya ability..lock u wiv ya own echoes in a large proximity...
minority sayin that u the illest on this site...beg to differ...on 2 knees cos im polite...
invite you here to view me as i rip the mic....not literally but wiv yours i just might...
yeh bitch i can put you in the hood...in my own garden beneath the mud...
by changing the air pressure quickly leavin nitrogen stuck in ya blood...
conseaved in a house on rental...creativitie created by mistake in sacramento...
born june the third, 1988 its centermental...bet ya wish ya still ad ya dad as a momento....1


couple of links below for the first bar-anything u don't understand pm me n ask..pz

http://community.rapbattles.com/sho...76&page=1&pp=15

[B]HE WAS IN CLAS-SIC WEN I DROPPED THIS Y'ALL (first bar)[B]

we were both in clas sic, he was my leader, n there were rumours he wud leave n he has done!

u had to know this cos wen i wrote the verse that was the situation!

uppin ya verse creativitie

i sint even in this kids crew...and hes still callin me his leader....
i cant believe this kid is top ten.........
NEW RB YES WERE THAT MUCH BETTA

ur punchlines dont reach me its like ur verbally shadow boxing//
lrycally stopping these dick riders by verbally cock blocking//
inever spit first cuz these BITING mcs FEED off my verses//
i even aint at my apex but still on top of hip hops surface//
if U was spittin speed bumps, U still couldnt be textin obstacles//
MORTAL KOMBAT puttin U in the hospital, ur FATALITY is optional//
your d/r thinkin my DICKS ON FIRE cuz im CUMMING HOTTA then eva//
class sic tryn 2 RIAN well murderouse methods is here 2 change da weather//
check his sig even he says Creativitie battle - ILL,wile i still say he's whack//
the only way he will ever win a battle is wit some inadequate feed back//

man you jus chattin shit tryin get the d/r votes ya obviously get^^^^not in my crew and still callin me his leader....wot the fuck man you know i was n u were wen i wrote that verse its only out of date now COS YOU TOOK OVA A DAY TO DROP WHILE YOU WERE PRE-WRITTIN!!!!

UPPIN THIS

i don prewrite..if i prewrote this then it would have been way beeta then that.......believe that........................why is you gettin scared

i was feeling creativities shit he had more punches than pre
Pre had the flow and a little structure but no as good enough punches
yeh bitch i can put you in the hood...in my own garden beneath the mud...
by changing the air pressure quickly leavin nitrogen stuck in ya blood...
conseaved in a house on rental...creativitie created by mistake in sacramento...
this was Pre's best line and this was Creative's
ur punchlines dont reach me its like ur verbally shadow boxing//
lrycally stopping these dick riders by verbally cock blocking//
inever spit first cuz these BITING mcs FEED off my verses//
i even aint at my apex but still on top of hip hops surface//
if U was spittin speed bumps, U still couldnt be textin obstacles//
MORTAL KOMBAT puttin U in the hospital, ur FATALITY is optional//
your d/r thinkin my DICKS ON FIRE cuz im CUMMING HOTTA then eva//
class sic tryn 2 RIAN well murderouse methods is here 2 change da weather//
check his sig even he says Creativitie battle - ILL,wile i still say he's whack//
the only way he will ever win a battle is wit some inadequate feed back//
Yep Premantion got Murdered
My vote is for Creativitie

hey sorry creative but i cant vote cuz i need 20 post all get back at you though

coo...upppin for votes.............................

alrite uppin this, but man no punches? get real! read carefully!

there i did my vote and you have to read your stuff you didnt have anything that was good enough man

I really didn't like either of the verses that much...... Premenition tried too hard to hit the multis and it ended up havin empty punches. It flowwed kinda choppy in some spots too.....CreaTivitie came a little better with the flow. His punches seemed to connect more and I think he had the best punch in the battle......

check his sig even he says Creativitie battle - ILL,wile i still say he's whack//
the only way he will ever win a battle is wit some inadequate feed back//

I didn't like how he kept talkin about D/Rs though......started gettin old quick, but I still think he had the overall better verse.......

Vote - creaTivitie

....nuthin special.....

Both verses coulda been upped in complexity.....but its like this...

Flow-crea
structure-crea
punches-crea
multies-Non
Personals-Crea
Enjoyability-Crea

Thats the lot....need to up skill levels....keep at it PeaZ

return the favour!!!.....drop a vote on either of these links

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=120747
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=120603

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=121232
^^^ vote in mines

Okay,kinda weak battle.But Premation................
"minority sayin that u the illest on this site...beg to differ...on 2 knees cos im polite..."
^^^^okay,why are you saying this.This does not offend ur oppenent.Stck to topic.Diss oppenent.This line stuck with me as I was reading the rest.It kinda makes ur opponent look good,because ur stating that someone actually thinks he is the best.Think about what u write in the future.

thanks for the votes...........uppin for number 5