[b]this Shit Is Crazy!!!!!(comments Needed)[/b]
 

This is a song I put together real quick, your comments will be be appreciated so give me some good feedback!!

Chorus:
Reality is, these catz out here ain't real
Reality is, 99% in reverse actors gettin' deal
Reality is, rap's become about image an spinnin' wheels
Reality is, its not bout experiences but ideals

Reality is, these catz out here ain't real
Reality is, 99% in reverse actors gettin' deal
Reality is, rap's become about image an spinnin' wheels
Reality is, its not bout experiences but ideals

Rhymes are tighter than boxer briefs
Contagiuos enuff to change ya religious beliefs
Rhymes ahead of their time, they up for assasination
Spits sicker than sick, they used for vacsination
Deliver punchlines anytime, like mj in crunchtime
Punches hit so hard they literally punch lines
You can't deny I'm hot, jus can't be stopped
Everything u not, even the pope waitin' for me to drop
Stay pimpin', stackin' bricks like mutual funds
Game so tight a nigga be turning out nuns
Gettin' paid like 1st round draft picks is my fate
Cuz I got more bricks stacked than the empire state

Chorus:
Reality is, these catz out here ain't real
Reality is, 99% in reverse actors gettin' deal
Reality is, rap's become about image an spinnin' wheels
Reality is, its not bout experiences but ideals

Reality is, these catz out here ain't real
Reality is, 99% in reverse actors gettin' deal
Reality is, rap's become about image an spinnin' wheels
Reality is, its not bout experiences but ideals

I got the game wrapped up like christmas presents
So why would I pay attention to you peasants
AR's describe ya 16's as kinda sketchy
Mine's as infectous, thats why they say my hooks are catchy
I'm cashin' checks, while ya demo gettin' rejected
For u I stay wit 2 techs but never get ejected
My whips an chains got the game enslaved
Pick up a bible cuz u gon need to be saved
You step to me u garanteed to be slain
You not a mc, jus a fake david blaine
You don't got skills, jus gimmicks
You haven't mastered rhymes, u mastered mimics
Ya lyrical looseleaf ain't worthy to dust stages
I seen better lyrics posted on blank pages
You can't fuck wit one track I laid
Try ya luck, I got more 16's than the 10th grade
So, all you flakes I'm a have to shed
You still couldn't see me if ya vision was in for red
I'm amazed by your sheer audacity
Knowin' good an well u couldn't match 1/10 of my compacity

Chorus:
Reality is, these catz out here ain't real
Reality is, 99% in reverse actors gettin' deal
Reality is, rap's become about image an spinnin' wheels
Reality is, its not bout experiences but ideals

Reality is, these catz out here ain't real
Reality is, 99% in reverse actors gettin' deal
Reality is, rap's become about image an spinnin' wheels
Reality is, its not bout experiences but ideals

Let me know what ya really think, what ya like an don't like, holla!!

Oh yeah post a vote on the poll, holla back y'all

im guessin the song name is reality?

short song though might work more as 1 verse since its just 16 bars the lines are tight though nice flow everything i saw was good but all together it was more like 1 verse try addin to it an go from there with it

Yeah I agree.. the chorus is a bit long and repetitive to have it so often compared to verse. I can't judge the flow too well, but it looks pretty decent, kinda pleasent rhymes. overall pretty decent drop.

i dont know about that song, the verses are tight but it doesnt fit wit the hook, maybe u should try writin the verses n then the hook, thats just some advice from 1 lyricist 2 another give feedback on strictly the truth no twist n turns

i agree with e-looch its a lttle short but i think its good it was a pretty tight drop overall so i say its good

yo this shit was tite. the hook was simple but good and realistic. the first verse was hot, and the second verse altho it started off rocky was fire after the first 4 lines. coulda been longer. tite shit homie


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it was dope hiphop you have it all togather you might want to concider makein your song ali longer

Its too short.. but anyways im still feelin it a bit.. u jsut needa elevate some mroe thats all