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About a girl (feedback plz)
2nd open mic......
A second ago we was in a tight spot cuz u overheard me tellin a girl she was hot girl don't let that ruin our relationship cuz she ain't got you ass, your eyes or your hips so think right before you go crazy because a second ago u was as pretty as a daisy so listen to the facts cuz our love we can never act I thought u was down for me, down for us now all you wanna do is cuss and cuss i can't believe your attitude we was sexxin & u ruined the mood i sorry i don't wanna be cruel but since u ruined the mood i ran out of fuel cuz right now i'm sherm and u sucked up all the sperm i know, i know i'm gettin too personal but look at all the times u pushed & pulled all over and on the dick it was like u was driving a car and i was the stick back and forth up and down hurry up, hurry up saw a frown girl thought u wanted to get low thought u wanted to be treated like a hoe.......... ya thoughts on it????? |
That Shit Was Hot I Lik Ehow You Playboy'd It Up....holla Front .....1
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yo thanks fo tha feedback
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So Unique now i see ya up shits creek tried to start some beef and ran scared upon me showin my teeth ,mind playin tricks of casket thoughts with your family creepin over screamin no no god, dont take em away, one tounge lash. distaster strikes where it may. over cash or ass alas wake up you dont wanna play .......yo i need help i have no idea how to battle in here! |
yo ^^^^ u battle in the front lines homie...
yo the verse was tite i thought it was gonna be a pussy bitch song but i was wrong. the rhymes were a bit basic, the flow was aight, and up the vocab. yo holla back at mine THE SICKEST OF SICK |
ya i needa lot of practice since i'm juss beginning
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If u havin gurl trouble i feel bad for u son/I got 99 problems but a bitch aint one
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That was hott for a beginner man.. keep that shit up.. u just needa throw in some more wordplays
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naw i got a girl, i was juss writing a song bout my ex
but there's nuthin between us anymore cuz we cool wit each other we still friends i guess we started as friends & we gonna end as friends.... |
not bad at all man.. pretty hot
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yo thanks fo all the feedback appreciate it a lot
juss needa know how im doin |
good flow man for real .......keep hagglin this shit yo check out my shit.. dickridaz..on open mic aight peace
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so out of 10 wat do ya'll think
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Yea, I think this was pretty hot. You had good flow in it throughout. Increase the vocab in it, and it would be a 9 or a 9.5 outta 10. I give it 8.5. good drop. keep droppin'.
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aight thanks for all the feedback really appreciate it anymore for this
thing made like 2 weeks ago a day or 2 b4 I started really battling rating: ??/10 |
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