.::xFURIOSOx vs. DeLeon::.
 

10-12 lines
No DR/Crew/Hate votes w/e
No feeding (which means no takin shit from my verse and tryna counter it cuz dats jus lame...)

dats basically it jus check in and ill drop

checkin in...............................................

sorry i waited til today, had some shit to take care of. anyway...

ayo...
bring venom to this `battle` like snakes with `rattles`//1
you tryna flow against my current but ya boat has no `paddles`//2

right...

see ya look of `dread` as my words pierce ya `head`//3
rearrange ya name, subtract an 'e' ya cant fire back cuz ya got `NO-LED`(yup)//4
checked ya past: "rhymes look like something you ejaculated"?//5
tryna `fly-but-your-weighted` no wonder you aint `elevated`(flyweight)*//6
cat has `no-right` tryna win `dis-fight` wit rhymes `so-trite`//7
'DeLeon' has neither the roar 'of the lion' or it's `fierce-bite`(damn!)//8

tha fury...

you a contradictory `fable` meanin ya story's `real-unstable`//9
even if you DJ'ed you still couldnt `turn-tha-tables`( :evilgrin: )////10

iight drop whenevers...

dogg,who you think this is - its time to put this fag to bed/
cuz i just emptied 17 from my clip-- to tha back of your head/
Katz is like DAMN! Deleons do-ne lost it(gone crazy!)/
1 shot from my nine 'll have you leakin li-ke a faucet/
we know im at tha top so drop tha mic and walk/
before I shove it up your ass- so it amplifies your talk/
your game aint shit bitch-it's all static/
Im takin breaths away so you can call me an asthmatic/
I spit shit so hard it cripples your spine/
gettin out of line-liable to get you encased in tha pine(casket)/
you fuckin with the wrong man-im reppin Lyrical D/
This shits over motha fucka-R. I. P/

alright now lets get some votes up in here

HOOOOOLLLLLLAAAAAA!

drop a vote in this dont sleep on it

Good battle. SInce this is short I'll go through it line by line

xFuriousox -
ayo...
good thing you said ayo
bring venom to this `battle` like snakes with `rattles`//1
you tryna flow against my current but ya boat has no `paddles`//2
not bad... but not that many words rhyme with battle and they've all been played
right...

see ya look of `dread` as my words pierce ya `head`//3
rearrange ya name, subtract an 'e' ya cant fire back cuz ya got `NO-LED`(yup)//4
Ha, ok. I like it.
checked ya past: "rhymes look like something you ejaculated"?//5
tryna `fly-but-your-weighted` no wonder you aint `elevated`(flyweight)*//6
Good wordplay here. Very nice
cat has `no-right` tryna win `dis-fight` wit rhymes `so-trite`//7
'DeLeon' has neither the roar 'of the lion' or it's `fierce-bite`(damn!)//8
Ha, nice personal, showing some knowledge
tha fury...

you a contradictory `fable` meanin ya story's `real-unstable`//9
even if you DJ'ed you still couldnt `turn-tha-tables`( )////10
Damn, nice closwer


DeLeon -
dogg,who you think this is - its time to put this fag to bed/
cuz i just emptied 17 from my clip-- to tha back of your head/
weak opener. No one cares about your guns
Katz is like DAMN! Deleons do-ne lost it(gone crazy!)/
1 shot from my nine 'll have you leakin li-ke a faucet/
eh, nothing special here
we know im at tha top so drop tha mic and walk/
before I shove it up your ass- so it amplifies your talk/
Good stuff. subtle but nice
your game aint shit bitch-it's all static/
Im takin breaths away so you can call me an asthmatic/
Very nice again, you should have started out with rhymes like this
I spit shit so hard it cripples your spine/
gettin out of line-liable to get you encased in tha pine(casket)/
nothing spectacular here
you fuckin with the wrong man-im reppin Lyrical D/
This shits over motha fucka-R. I. P/
All RIP rhymes are officially played

Well I have to give it to Furiouso. I didn't mean to sound harsh on DeLeons verse but from some of the lines I can tell he can do better. He just has to get the opening and closing up to the caliber of the middle part of the verse.

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=122743

Opener- I give this to D cause I wasn't feel'n rattle battle bit
Mettas-Both of yall had some nice ones-tie
Punches-Furio cause his hit harder and there were more of em
Personals- Furio cause Delon spent to much time on the "gunz and clips bit"
Creativity-Furios much for the same reason as above,
Closer- This was a close one but because what your rep isn't much of a punch I'ma give it to Furio cause his closer was still a punch.

Vote- Furio

furious - damn kid u surprised me.....i expected an herb newbie....u spatnice punches....maybe one bar was wack....but u had nice meta's.....i liked the no led personal....showed ya creativity.....good verse....i'd give it a 8/10.....jus werk on werdplay.....nice drop....

deleon - damn i expected more from you man....not that many good punches....stretched lines....keeep elevatein and battlin.....but u didnt come wit the hard punches....

Vote - furious

Yeah I know dogg I wrote this shit like in 10 minutes

This Kid took like 2 days no beef though Forisos or however you spell it

Wow ptetty solid battle on our hands here
both spit very nice but i think furioso just
came harder with metas and his format besides the numberz thing was cool too
but yo im thinkin on any given day it could go back and forth just on this day fur took it cant wait till the rematch..............

ayo deleon did it again. dawg that flow is off the chain forreal forreal. xfuriosox i didn't like then breaks in it so it gotta get marked down and how you gonna give yourself props that just gay: 'DeLeon' has neither the roar 'of the lion' or it's `fierce-bite`(damn!)// best line outta both was:we know im at tha top so drop tha mic and walk/
before I shove it up your ass- so it amplifies your talk/
your game aint shit bitch-it's all static/
Im takin breaths away so you can call me an asthmatic/
(i should have copyed the whole thing cause it was just that good)
My vote: you no Deleon

FURIOSO:good battle,nice rhyming words with battle,cause nothing really rhymes with that anymore and all the words have been used already.good structure,i like the way you made the words that were supposed to rhyme bold.you had some real good material with shit like
ayo...
bring venom to this `battle` like snakes with `rattles`//1
you tryna flow against my current but ya boat has no `paddles`//2
this is good,real tight,nothing to say.
overall:8/10

DELEON:not bad of a battle here,pretty good structure,weak wordplay,overused topic,flow wasnt bad,um,not that great of a comeback after a real good verse by furioso.i wasnt feeling some of your lines
I spit shit so hard it cripples your spine/
gettin out of line-liable to get you encased in tha pine
the weakest one by far and need improvement.
overall:4/10

FINAL VOTE: FURIOSO