JPoll vs. Luminaz
 

alright the rules are

blind spit posted by 6 oclock mountain time...
10 lines
no dr
no crew

reg rules

Killin dis bitch
 

JPoll Ill make the lethal injection go in your direction,
You sound like you from the centre of mental correction,
Rhyme so fake your guilty of fraud and deception,
Ill kik you off your bridge like KRS did to Shan,
You aint even Muslim but u celebrate Ramadan,
Claimin that you fast but your jst a hungry man,
Spittin at me that could b counted as verbal suicide,
But i already killed you twice now thats double homicide,
Im wipin so many mc's out im commitin genicide,
Your gona b dead in 12 as if you swallowed cyanide,
J Poll jus bin added to my death toll,
Kik you cross the room whilst smokin weed 2 see how much J Roll!! (joint)

You sed 12-14 lines

come on now...get some originality wit this...that no personal bullshit...prewritten like whoa!!!

whatever...here's some original shit...

check it lume, this is a lesson...

"Lume" ur about as witty as Joey on 'Friends',
U rhyme trends...like the show I'm puttin your rhymin to an end,
But unlike it...your career never begun,
Reading your generics is like watching Roseanne re-runs,
YUR WACK!...
You ain't a challenge...already merked...and i'm talking bout t.v.,
You like another bitch too, that blonde ho....you know phoebe,
She's retarded, ur halfminded...bringin a battle to me, ya rook,
Ur shits prewrit like Jin on 106...that ain't garner respect in my book,
You're murdered, now u 0 and 2, I'm callin you 'REDRUM',
If you were a movie...it'd be called "The village of the dumb",
My premise...you don't hit...but my words cause tremors,
The only way from not gettin ko'd is to jump off a cliff like you was a lemur...



that's a lesson in textstyle...don't prewrite that's weak shit...

mmore better flows, punches and stucture. He had nice vocabs and multies. j poll won dis.

another thing is that luminaz... lacked and didn't fit very well, a lod of simple rap but nothing special. Boring text. in my opinion dumb, no creativity, you had some metephors but didn't go very well in your structures and flow.

uppin for some votes...please be well explained...thanks

uppin
 

dis is luminaz uppin for votes, cmon dat was sum funny shit i wrote

luminaz
 

talkin bout prewritten, all your rhymes were pre written mine had yur dam name in so how were they pre written? Jus coz urs had a part of my name at beginnin doesnt make it a straight flow. Wat makes urs not pre-written?

uppin for some votes............................................. .......

JPoll Ill make the lethal injection go in your direction,
You sound like you from the centre of mental correction,
Rhyme so fake your guilty of fraud and deception,
6...aight multi but overall weak punch!!
Ill kik you off your bridge like KRS did to Shan,
You aint even Muslim but u celebrate Ramadan,
Claimin that you fast but your jst a hungry man,
4...weak man, made-up personals never work!!
Spittin at me that could b counted as verbal suicide,
But i already killed you twice now thats double homicide,
5...too basic, sounds pre-written!!
Im wipin so many mc's out im commitin genicide,
Your gona b dead in 12 as if you swallowed cyanide,
5...aight multi again but that suicide, homicide, genocide shit has been done!!
J Poll jus bin added to my death toll,
Kik you cross the room whilst smokin weed 2 see how much J Roll!! (joint)
4...weak finisher!!

"Lume" ur about as witty as Joey on 'Friends',
U rhyme trends...like the show I'm puttin your rhymin to an end,
7...aight multi, not ure best but still gud!!
But unlike it...your career never begun,
Reading your generics is like watching Roseanne re-runs,
YUR WACK!...
6...funny shit, but still i've seen u do better!!
You ain't a challenge...already merked...and i'm talking bout t.v.,
You like another bitch too, that blonde ho....you know phoebe,
7...gud line, back to the Friends shit again!!
She's retarded, ur halfminded...bringin a battle to me, ya rook,
Ur shits prewrit like Jin on 106...that ain't garner respect in my book,
8...sick, best line so far!!
You're murdered, now u 0 and 2, I'm callin you 'REDRUM',
If you were a movie...it'd be called "The village of the dumb",
5...ure worst line, bleh!!
My premise...you don't hit...but my words cause tremors,
The only way from not gettin ko'd is to jump off a cliff like you was a lemur...
6...aight closer cud have been better!!

straight up
JPoll killed this battle and he didnt even try!!
overall better flow, and far better punches!
luminz u need to elevate a hella lot!!

return the fav wit honest votes on my battles!
links in the sig.

thanks for the honest vote....and maybe you didn't see but redrum is from a movie...its murder backwards...

uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin..............,

JPoll Ill make the lethal injection go in your direction,
You sound like you from the centre of mental correction,
Aight opener.....Not that good
Rhyme so fake your guilty of fraud and deception,
Ill kik you off your bridge like KRS did to Shan,
O.K.....Not that hard...Work more on it
You aint even Muslim but u celebrate Ramadan,
Claimin that you fast but your jst a hungry man,
Weak....Very weak
Spittin at me that could b counted as verbal suicide,
But i already killed you twice now thats double homicide,
Weak again......
Im wipin so many mc's out im commitin genicide,
Your gona b dead in 12 as if you swallowed cyanide,
Best line so far...
J Poll jus bin added to my death toll,
Kik you cross the room whilst smokin weed 2 see how much J Roll!! (joint)
Ummmm...Noooo...not that good for a closiner
Nice structure....Nice complixety...Keep elevatin....2/5

"Lume" ur about as witty as Joey on 'Friends',
U rhyme trends...like the show I'm puttin your rhymin to an end,
Nice...In a way opener
But unlike it...your career never begun,
Reading your generics is like watching Roseanne re-runs,
LOL....Yea I hate the reruns too...Nice punch
YUR WACK!...
You ain't a challenge...already merked...and i'm talking bout t.v.,
You like another bitch too, that blonde ho....you know phoebe,
Weak in a way...
She's retarded, ur halfminded...bringin a battle to me, ya rook,
Ur shits prewrit like Jin on 106...that ain't garner respect in my book,
ummm lil but weak lil but not....
You're murdered, now u 0 and 2, I'm callin you 'REDRUM',
If you were a movie...it'd be called "The village of the dumb",
LOL sortof funny but kind of weak
My premise...you don't hit...but my words cause tremors,
The only way from not gettin ko'd is to jump off a cliff like you was a lemur...
Sortof weak closiner

Nice strcture and stuff....... 4/5

Can you return the favor please against born2spitt...Make a good explanation....Holla nice battle
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=121447

uppin uppin straight uppin uppin..................

can ya return the favor.....sorry for the 2nd post