dischcharge vrs. fine mind
 

8-12 lines
no d/r
no crew votes
u spit first since you challenged
check in verse due 30 minuts after check in
:thumbup: good luck

battle
 

yo disscharged ur gonna be dismantled, magled, dangled in any direction/
you spit weak, since your a computer geek, i bet you can't even speak/
im a lyrisis that will dispense you, then demolish you, haunting/
i'm breathing lerking down ya neck, driving you bizerk/
I'll startle you and give you a heart seizure, paramedics couldn't save ya/
I'll dig you a big grave to hold the storage of all ya family put together/
I don't speak honest to bitches, im hyronic to the phycotic rippin eye lids off/
You ur 2 scared to face me, i'll come bombing in my car to run u bitch down/
you were lieing dead found, ferenzics on the case couldn't fingure that out/

looks guys! im batteling unknown a.k.a. fine mind and hes about to get fried //
good rhymes are what you cannot provide,so you will be left behind//
see my rhymes are fully aligned, but your an embaressment to all of mankind//
ur unknown but im known world-wide,i give you credit atleast you tried//
ok put all jokes aside all jokes aside,you might get your first win in the year 2009//
your rhymes are just like anna nicholes pussy......just BLOWN//
your rhymes are bitten,mine are home grown,give it up bitch your unknown//
ill leave you left like you were hit by a cyclone,i won,this that is etched in stone//
im the king and this is my throne,and your elton jon's clone//
ok newb next time leave your weak rhymes at home// !!!!!!!
that was easy haha

that was a joke haha thats easy shit there :noob:

man madd people are sleepin on this lil weak battle ^uppin^

fine mind urs lacked flow and rhyming but ur vocab and multies were good. but dsicharge came wit the same multies and better flwo and punches hit harder and made sense so ima give it to discharge

Fine mind...you had a classic newb verse, you had no punches, no set ups, no personals, no wordplay, no creativity, weak vocab, decent structure, an it flowed alrite but that the only positive of whole verse.

Discharge...I can see you didn't try very hard but you had one punch that won it, that was the anna nicole line, nice punch, the rest was weak, but you at least had a battle verse, weak but present punches, good flow, good structure, thats about it, needs work, respect
Flow: Dis
Structure: Dis
Punches: Dis
Those are really only things to vote on, weak battle
Vote: Discharge

Find mind:
ur rap wasnt good at all.. it was wack man.. and u had multies but ur strucutre and rhymes lacked.. u have to comebine multies along wit ur strucutre bro..

Discharge:
looks guys! im batteling unknown a.k.a. fine mind and hes about to get fried //
good rhymes are what you cannot provide,so you will be left behind//
-nice start
then u kept on goin really well... ur style was good too.. overall u was good

ha ha ha ..this is a easy vote..discharge

fine mind..ur punches weren't good at all

discharge..ur spit, punch...multies and evry thing else was good...so u won this..u didn't even have to try to win this one

thanks alot royal dickless im glad you put your imput into this one

My Vote
 

yo disscharged ur gonna be dismantled, magled, dangled in any direction/
you spit weak, since your a computer geek, i bet you can't even speak/
NO RHYME...and useless multis....weak punch....2/10
im a lyrisis that will dispense you, then demolish you, haunting/
i'm breathing lerking down ya neck, driving you bizerk/
nope...1/10
I'll startle you and give you a heart seizure, paramedics couldn't save ya/
I'll dig you a big grave to hold the storage of all ya family put together/
wtf?....1/10
I don't speak honest to bitches, im hyronic to the phycotic rippin eye lids off/
You ur 2 scared to face me, i'll come bombing in my car to run u bitch down/
you were lieing dead found, ferenzics on the case couldn't fingure that out/
gay...2/10

Verse Score : 6/40

Okay this verse sucked....get punches....use personals....rhyme scheme <-- learn that....learn everything....

looks guys! im batteling unknown a.k.a. fine mind and hes about to get fried //
good rhymes are what you cannot provide,so you will be left behind//
ok punch...need better wordplay....4/10
see my rhymes are fully aligned, but your an embaressment to all of mankind//
ur unknown but im known world-wide,i give you credit atleast you tried//
ok put all jokes aside all jokes aside,you might get your first win in the year 2009//
weak punch...3/10
your rhymes are just like anna nicholes pussy......just BLOWN//
your rhymes are bitten,mine are home grown,give it up bitch your unknown//
ill leave you left like you were hit by a cyclone,i won,this that is etched in stone//
Not that hard of a punch....3/10
im the king and this is my throne,and your elton jon's clone//
ok newb next time leave your weak rhymes at home// !!!!!!!
aight...4/10

Verse Score : 14/40

Aight your verse was weak but u didnt have to come hard....werk on punches....use meta's and personals...just elevate....

Vote - discharge