Premanition vs. illtalic
 

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no dick riding
no crew votes
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Czech.

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Fuck this amateur.. ya lil more than a fake fortune teller
There`s no mystery
Cos ya premonition of winnin` is no good fella
So stay listenin` to admonitions an admit I`m sellin ya out
You don`t belong
But I`m indigenous to rap.. like Native.. with twice the clout
Have ya slapped about.. an labelled RB`s punch bag
Kid looks flushed
Verse is rushed cos he`s already bloodied like cunt rags
Ya goin` nowhere.. an ya doin it fast.. wackness akin
“Fuck You”
I don`t need a comeback.. I jus` wipe it from ya mom`s chin
Damn at that line bein` enuff to floor ya weak frame
Seek help
Cos seekin the win is dumb.. you aint even ill` as my name
Seem`s this fag`s confused.. yo`.. it aint R&B.com
Idea`s don`t float
You couldn`t hold a note.. let alone drop a bomb.

hope premanition showz

Audio out of the question….even ya txt ain’t straight….(italic)
Great wen im servin u a merkin n u finish lickin the plate…
Proud of ya ‘murderous methods?’..get um published in a book…
Cos to tell you the truth illtalic…I just don’t give a fuck…
No-one gives u a double look…u jus runnin ya mouth off…
Ya girl givin me a double suck…leavin rinsin her mouth off…
Man you must be gangsta…y’all this guys from the hood…
Check his avatar…the laughtar had me coughin up blood….
Routine equals daily rejection…bitch ur wanted by none…
Ya moms wide cos she tried to put u back where u came from…
Wen I saw the draw…I hoped at most this wud be close…
But wen you spittin wack shit like that…
…No wonder this league short on votes…

This battle is really getting slept on.....

Illtalic came OK but I know I've seen better from him. His punches were hittin at first but kinda fell off in a few spots. Flow is unique cause I haven't seen anyone try to bite it yet. Overall a solid verse.......Premanition came out hot with his opener but then he fell off drastically. Punches weren't really there and he was rhymin words with themselves. Flow was OK but nothin special.......


Illtalic's best line....
Fuck this amateur.. ya lil more than a fake fortune teller
There`s no mystery
Cos ya premonition of winnin` is no good fella

Premanition's best line.....
Audio out of the question….even ya txt ain’t straight….(italic)
Great wen im servin u a merkin n u finish lickin the plate…

Vote - Illtalic

uppin

OK.. ill that structure is annoying, but I guess some people like it so whatever. You had some nice punches, the opener with the name play and the closer were pretty tight. I don't know why the hell you are riding Native's dick in your battle.. that was just weak as fuck.

"
I don`t need a comeback.. I jus` wipe it from ya mom`s chin"

that was funny when i first saw it in that thread... but bleh. still decent verse though.

Prem, you really would have had this one, if not for lines 3-6, which sucked hard. The rhymes were week, the punches were bleh.. and I think he pulled off a bitch move because I don't see an avatar so I don't get the 4th bar. Anyway, your closing bars were pretty nice, so if you had been consistent with that level, you would have won.

breakdown for illtalic:

flow:pretty good nothing complex but no off spots 6/10

volcab:good job nothing really to say 6/10

punches:not too many lines that were direct or atleast not played best line,"Cos ya premonition of winnin` is no good fella" not a bad name flip 6/10

overall:18/30

breakdown for premanition:

flow:nice use nothing too complex but good job 6/10

volcab:slightly better then your openent still room for improvment 7/10

punches:best line,"Audio out of the question….even ya txt ain’t straight….(italic)" original name flip good job at staying on your opponent and not straying too much 7/10

overall:20/30

vote--premanition

uppin

Fuck this amateur.. ya lil more than a fake fortune teller
There`s no mystery
Cos ya premonition of winnin` is no good fella
7
So stay listenin` to admonitions an admit I`m sellin ya out
You don`t belong
But I`m indigenous to rap.. like Native.. with twice the clout
7
Have ya slapped about.. an labelled RB`s punch bag
Kid looks flushed
Verse is rushed cos he`s already bloodied like cunt rags
8
Ya goin` nowhere.. an ya doin it fast.. wackness akin
“Fuck You”
I don`t need a comeback.. I jus` wipe it from ya mom`s chin
9
Damn at that line bein` enuff to floor ya weak frame
Seek help
Cos seekin the win is dumb.. you aint even ill` as my name
8
Seem`s this fag`s confused.. yo`.. it aint R&B.com
Idea`s don`t float
You couldn`t hold a note.. let alone drop a bomb.
7

7/10
nice drop

Audio out of the question….even ya txt ain’t straight….(italic)
Great wen im servin u a merkin n u finish lickin the plate…
10 nice
Proud of ya ‘murderous methods?’..get um published in a book…
Cos to tell you the truth illtalic…I just don’t give a fuck…
7
No-one gives u a double look…u jus runnin ya mouth off…
Ya girl givin me a double suck…leavin rinsin her mouth off…
7
Man you must be gangsta…y’all this guys from the hood…
Check his avatar…the laughtar had me coughin up blood….
7
Routine equals daily rejection…bitch ur wanted by none…
Ya moms wide cos she tried to put u back where u came from…
9
Wen I saw the draw…I hoped at most this wud be close…
But wen you spittin wack shit like that…
…No wonder this league short on votes…
8

v nice drop 8.5/10

v/prem

hit the championship match yo

2-2.

Vote - illatalic for a better verse

period

3-2 uppin