luminaz vs. shady1132
 

deadlines:
battles go up monday
check in by wedsday
verses due by thrusday
votes due by sunday
rules:
no dick riding
no crew votes
no freeposting that's what the beef thread is for if you do it here more then three times your dq'd
no feeding off of other guys verse
bar limits:
4 bar min.
16 bar max.

luminaz
 

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battle scar
 

Shady, why the fuck you entered this tournament,
Im gona diss you while you sit there like sum mantlepiece ornament,
Cover you in rhymes like lyrical sediment,
Man, your spits hold you back like a speech impediment,
For my last sentence, it was life prisonment, (prison sentence, lyric sentence)
If your rhymes were personified they'd be Christopher Walken,
Aint got no rhthm just stick to your CD walkman,
With those headphones in your ears,
Im spittin venem more toxic trhan britney spears,
Your mam so fat she cries gravy in her tears,
Think your shady well the spolights on you,
So many eminem wannabes your shady no.1 1 3 2,

Lumidaz,you always be gettin ur dog nutered......cause it got big balls/
But the only reason you doing that shit......... is cause you got none/
Ur rhymes softer........ than the stomach of Fat Joe or Big Punt/
The only way u cuttle........is with ur dog,which you only hump/
And it hurts too,cause ur dick got nothing but a bunch of bumps/
The reason ur mom neglects you,is cause Osama fucked ur mama/
Then comes Saddam to join....who you willingly hump like a llama/
And u think u a thug cause you be rocking rocAwear and a pair of TIMS/
So many assholes out there......your number one.....LUMIDAZ/

Terrible. lumidaz automatically wins because shady is so bad, and lumidaz had a nice personal at the end. lum: some of your bars were stretched, and the prison sentence wordplay was pretty whack, otherwise a pretty nice verse.

Ok you're honestly telling me this doesn't count, so here goes:

lumidaz had a nice personal at the end, with the Shady no whatever. That is what a good punch is. You had problems at the beggining with stretching your lines, but otherwise had at least decent vocab and nice rhymes, made it refreshing to read. Shady's verse sucked. No punches that hit hard, painful to read (not just because of structure) and that last line was just terrible, didn't even make sense. lumidaz at least tried some wordplay and original shit. battle over. period.

this line itself could have won the battle too:

"
Cover you in rhymes like lyrical sediment,
Man, your spits hold you back like a speech impediment,"

shady had nothing of that calibur. his whole verse together wasn't of that calibur.

Shady ur such a wannabe man, ur whack, luminaz, u were the sh!t man, u totally won...

neither of those count unless you re edit them breaking the match down and explaining why you vote

votes
 

so if no one else votes properly is this match a draw?

Shady, why the fuck you entered this tournament,
Im gona diss you while you sit there like sum mantlepiece ornament,
Cover you in rhymes like lyrical sediment,
weak
Man, your spits hold you back like a speech impediment,
For my last sentence, it was life prisonment, (prison sentence, lyric sentence)
decent
If your rhymes were personified they'd be Christopher Walken,
Aint got no rhthm just stick to your CD walkman,
lol mad me laugh
With those headphones in your ears,
Im spittin venem more toxic trhan britney spears,
nice wordplay
Your mam so fat she cries gravy in her tears,
Think your shady well the spolights on you,
So many eminem wannabes your shady no.1 1 3 2,
lol nice finser

6/10 ok vocab but horrible flow

Lumidaz,you always be gettin ur dog nutered......cause it got big balls/
But the only reason you doing that shit......... is cause you got none/
Ur rhymes softer........ than the stomach of Fat Joe or Big Punt/
btw its big pun hahaha didnt rhyme well
The only way u cuttle........is with ur dog,which you only hump/
And it hurts too,cause ur dick got nothing but a bunch of bumps/
ha crap rhyming
The reason ur mom neglects you,is cause Osama fucked ur mama/
Then comes Saddam to join....who you willingly hump like a llama/
sucks so much its sooo funny
And u think u a thug cause you be rocking rocAwear and a pair of TIMS/
So many assholes out there......your number one.....LUMIDAZ/
eh?

2/10

vote/lumidaz

so if i was like you luminaz i would vote against you...just because you did it to me... which you did just because i merked your ass...well i'm not that immature...bitch

vote
 

no it coz u were beaten, enygma did sum heavy rhymes no wonder he was da champion last week, u paranoid or sumthin?

hey remember when ko'd your ass....hahahahahahhaha don't hate cause your terrible dude

Shady. . Wow Fuckin` Quit Rap NOW .. You Suck . .



I almost shit myself laughing at how childish and immature that line was. .


V/Lumidaz - You were pretty bad to but you was slightly better than shady.

lum took this cos he had an o.k verse there that was quite creative n had some gud punches, shady was wack flow was off in my head n not one punch hit hard enough but keep at it man, peace.

v/lum