Freesytle by ~FaKiE~! Sick Shit!
 

What up. I just wanna get some things written and shit, so im just gonna give a little freestyle, but its not gonna be dissin anyone, its just gonna be, like, sick. Ight.
yo/
we gonna bang or ball, we gonna twist it up/
we gonna brawl like a motha fucka, fuckin it up/
imma kill everything that i see in this place/
fuck it, imma kill everybody that i see in this place.
cuz when i grab ahold of my knife, then imma just start swingin/
youll be dead too before u can even start thinkin/
cuz imma murderer, a criminal, drug-addict and a thug/
and when u see me late night, ill be chillin at the club/
Sellin my ho's, and gettin all the cash/
Then youll see me on the dance floor smokin up my stash/
Ill have about an ounce, and ill smoke it all right there/
You can say that its a crime, but i really dont care/
I dont really give a fuck what the fuck you think/
as long as you respect me then ill let u have a drink/
of that bottle of bacardi that u know that i be grabbin/
and this is all before i start up wit the stabbin.
so its best to get on my good side and never fuck it up/
never fuck the fact that u my hommie, thats whats up!/


so theres just a little thing i wrote real quick. But dont get me wrong, i can battle too. So anyone have any thing to say, just say it, i dont care. Ight, thanx. Peace out! Fakie!

It wasn't that complex and no multies...but it rhymed *one*

SB

ight, um, thanx, i guess.

Ight, imma just put another verse up, ight. Peace!

20 times a day, 7 dayz a week/
i hit that phatty blunt, then i try to go to sleep.
lace it wit "E", it will get us fucked up/
stick my dick in ur mouth just to make u shut up/
but it feels hella good, so i wont take it out/
but ill go back and forth, then ill bust up in ur mouth/
then ill take it out quick and ill bust up in ur eye/
then ill take a few more hits, cuz i need to get more high/
but now im fucked up, and im ready to fight/
and i usually kick an ass just about every night/
so ill find ur fat mom, and ill slit her fuckin throat/
do it just to piss you off, then ill leave a fuckin note/
It will tell u where to find me if you really wanna come/
but just to let u know i gotta big fuckin gun/
and it will be fun when i put a bullet in ur ass/
then i smoke some more, nigga, "puff, puff, pass!"/
nah, fuck that, i aint sharin it wit you/
and if you put up a fight, nigga, fuck you too/
cuz ill smoke it all myslef, a fuckin pound and a half/
and when i smoke that much, i cant help but laugh/

ight, so let me know what u think, ight. peace

u aint have no vocab tha structure was aight, ya topic jumped back n forth 4/10

I need more feedback people!! what what you think!!

like shorty said vocab iz like a 3 yr old. look son i aint downin ya flow don't jus write think of sum shyt niggas gone be like yo fam thats hot ya heard holla front