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Troubled Girl
trapped in the mind frame of a lost child counting sheep to sleep stimulating my mind wit books like "The Little Engine That Could" when this world only wants to hold us down filling my mind with thoughts that after prayer everything will be fine but i wake to find that yesterday is just as useless as tommorrow answering my questions with answers that lead to more questions and wonder why before you say goodnight my last word is always WHY generating ideas in my mind that got me growing before my time imagining a world where peace resides and up the latter of success is the only way i could climb not understanding phrases that will save my soul yet those words of hatred i find are easily defined when he crime rate becomes the focus of disscusion and our children dont have decent books to keep their mind right its tyme to drown our tears and sorrow fix whats broken not whats lost change whats wrong not whats right fight for me fight for truth dont just fight to fight stop teeling me im only young cuz i know wrong from right im a troubled girl who could think of words that have you contemplating a change have you mastering a way to loose those bad dreams before you say goodnight trigger things in ya head to make you wanna read this twice and show you that a troubled girl, grown in here own ways, determined to win, filled with questions, no longer needs to end conversations with the word WHY |
this was a nice piece of poetry lyrical i was really feelin this it was really deep raw emotion..good choice of vocabulary solid piece out of a 10 i would give this piece a 8.5...really good poetry there
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that was really hot and i read it like 4 times to fully understand and u got alot of talent do u rap too ?
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yes i do rap to @blaze and thanx for the feedback both mcZ holla ppl
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A really excellent piece of work...I am highly impressed.While others tend to write about the average thing....you took the initiative and the gamble to be different....and its really hot...it had my mind seriously stimulated...please continue to exercise your mind and continue to allow us to feel and read what you think.
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whoa my baby liked it^^^ thanx pa much appreciated
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Hmm, was a really nice piece with the great message of confusion and the ever popular question of why. This was a pretty nice piece with good emotion set behind it and some good points brought up. Nice drop.
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iight thanx muxh appreciated
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yo this was a good piece....not bat imager and it had good emotion keep it up......i liked the way you set it up and the emotion and thought that you seemed to put into this
can you peep the 5 pieces i have in here.....thanks |
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