*Just so You Realize* (dis "NEWBIE" needs feedback)
 

it's on my mind...

INTRODUCING the rawest chick alive I break dicks just for*da~hell~of~it*/
INFLUINCING YOU TO *FUCK* WIT MY MIND you better of *CELIBATE*//1
I fold complicated raps like I fold jeans on my Lap/
I LOAD so many khaks with *led* YOU'D THINK I WORKED AT THE GAP//2
IT'S THAT SIMPLE~I INVITE YOU TO REVIEW MY #1 FEMCEE CRADENTIALS~YOUR RHYMES ARE SUSPENDABLE~I'M LIKE YA MOTHER *VERY DEPENDABLE*//3
THERE IS NO ADDITIONAL OPTIONS SO REPLY TO THESE TOPICS/
WORKING WIT MY SUBLIMINAL CAPTIONS TO BLOW OUT CHA OPTICS/4
BROUGHT HERE TO BRING THE PAIN *AS STRAIGHT AS TRACKS ON A TRAIN*/
SPOKENBLUNTLY AS WHITE AS *CANE* DA FACTS ARE *CLEAR AND PLAIN*//5
DIS CHICK PUFFS DIME SAKCS~I TAKES NO WISE CRACKS FROM *NO ONE*/
LIKE MADOSA I LEAVE YA SKELATOL FRAME IN ICE COLD SHAME VERY *COLD SON*//6
*HIGHLY UNDERESTIMATED*~Second rated~I PERFER MY PLATNIUM *MICS* DOUBLE PLATED*~FOR MY LIFE I WOULDN'T *TRADE IT*/
CUZ WHEN GOD *CREATED*~HE *STATED* THAT FAME WAS *OVER-RATED*~*THE WORLD IS NOW FOREVER *TAINTED*~AND NOW MONEY IS THE ONLY THING THAT'S WORTH BEING *DEBATED*//7
AND THAT'S WHY I BRAG ABOUT MY SUPERFICIAL LYRICS/
I SCREAM IT LOUD SO EVEN THE DEAD *SPIRITS CAN HEAR IT*//8
SO EVEN NET CATS CAN FEAR IT ~MY UNDENYABLE TALENT/
MAKES YOUR MIND RUN *RAMPENT*~THIS IS CERTIFIED DEDICATION *GO AHEAD AND STAMP~IT*//9

SPOKENBLUNTLY :nono:

jus checked this ish it was nice you got sick vocab..i can tell your intelligent...good flow....you stayed consistant i didnt see anywhere you fell off ..this was sick...you'd be a sick battler....this is a sick song...keep it up..ill be lookin for more from u

P.S check da "NOT ANOTHA ONE" open mic in my sig

thanks for the feed papi...(and i was feeling ur not anotha one fo reals) STILL UPPIN

*dueces* SB

Damn spoken, this shit is hot, i like how u show your intellegence in your flow, stay up..and keep writting!!!!!!!

thanks for da peeps ma...STILL UPPIN *oness*

SB

feelin it
 

spit was solid, ya got some skills. these other cats overrated it a bit but it was still good. just rhyme your extended shits (*da~hell~of~it*/ *CELIBATE*//) a lil better and that shit woulda been mad sick. good rhymin though i was feelin it

*applause* you had this shit going from teh beginning. you kinda lost drive near teh ending bar but you still killed it. nice drop. wordplay and vocab was nice, minimal but effective. punches were there and all clean, you could be a great battler. meta's were nice, you had alot of them but they meshed well. multi's were dope, it's like you were meant for them shits. seriously, this is a wonderful drop and i want to see more from you like this.