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D-Bate 05-10-04 10:16 AM

Quick Free, Peep it, and Leave some Feed
 
Life is like a box, you can take only what you put in/
so, put in somethin hott, and that is what you get/
most rappers do this to get rich/
but I do it, kuz i got love for it/
my homie's Hale-D, Stee-V/
these peeps stay true to me/
together we make up Phase 2/
whenever we battle, we wreck that crew/
and we'd murder you too, so dont try dude/

onetwo 05-10-04 11:12 AM

not bad. no real concept, but keystyles don't need one huh? your rhymes sounded forced half the time, so you need to work on that. your structure is bothersome too. the opener would have been better, if you stuck to it, and worked on teh rhyming words better. keep at it.

D-Bate 05-10-04 11:37 AM

thnx man


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