U Take Me Away!
 

u take me away,
and u i can depend, u da one leaving me amend,
u take me da rite, place in my life,
to da paradise where i can relax nice.
dont matter if ur richer,
u help me down, dont matter ur my perfect picture,
we get around, it's perfect livin.
u r my, everything,
and only u can bring, whenever u sing,
i smile again i think.
my other friends are da dull ones, u da fun one,
u da perfect person, u dat perfect someone.
u the thing and eveyrthing needed, u got me seated,
so i can read over reapeated,
listen to ur lyrics, rockin da beat,
u make gr8 music livin da street,
how can someone like u so hurt,
make somehting so beautiful from da dirt.

same deal here bro, Practice on cleanin up your format a little, from there you can elevate

Yo i got three words for you PRACTICE PRACTICE PRACTICE
good context but bad use of it try to make as much sence as possible
for instance......you put down....

"how can someone like u so hurt,
make somehting so beautiful from da dirt."

thats my example of good context but bad use.
when you could have said....
"How can someone like you hurt,
when you look so damn good in that mini skirt." lol

see like that!!! keep postin and practice to get reactions

Peayce

hey man thanks appriciate it ;)