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nuff_trouble 05-11-04 04:07 PM

the beauty of a woman thru a mans eyes
 
what is the beauty of a woman thru a mans eyes?

the way she holds her head up high
neva towards the ground,but towards the sky
it might be the twinkle in her eye
or the juggle in her thigh

thats the beauty of a woman thru a mans eyes

what is the beauty of a woman thru a mans eyes?

the cofidence of a woman drives a man wild
her personality goes with her style
the bright white teeth that shows in her smile
her lovely scent that draws a crowd

thats the beauty of a woman thru a mans eyes

what is the beauty of a woman thru a mans eyes

the fullness in her lips
her soft finger tips
the way she shakes her hips
now thats something a good man cant miss

thats the beauty of a woman thru a mans eyes

whats the beauty of a woman thru a mans eyes

the strengh of a woman is what makes a man
cause cant no man do what a real woman can
a man cant walk without holding a womans hand
and a real man is a real womans fan

thats the beauty of a woman thru a mans eyes

[♡]_Fuck_you_ho 05-11-04 04:11 PM

Where You Expecting FeedBack? (Thought I Would Ask)

nuff_trouble 05-11-04 04:36 PM

yeah...i just need to see what i need to work on...and i have another poem on here too..so all feedback is accepable

[♡]_Fuck_you_ho 05-11-04 04:42 PM

Alright Then!! lol.....

I Would Say You Fell A Little Short In Each Line' ..!! But It Was A Pretty Plain & Simple Poetic Scripture' ..!! I Wouldn't Really Classify Anything Is Wrong With It ....

the way she holds her head up high
neva towards the ground,but towards the sky
it might be the twinkle in her eye
or the juggle in her thigh
^Except The First' 4Lines' ... I Really Aint Feelin Them' .. But The Rest Looks Quite Over-Whelming (Jokes) .. Its "Safe" .. Nothing Great...!! Yet Wasn't .. Horibble

nuff_trouble 05-11-04 04:48 PM

lol..iight


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