CounTREE Jay Vs. DeLeon
 

aight check it
you spit first
10-12 lines
no hate
D/R or crew votes

your verse is due around 5:00-5:30
20 mins after that I'll drop mine

aight just check in

Check, and don't feed of my verse. Fresh lines too.

~CJ~

Occupation: Killin' dis katz? Must be a form of Spanglish,
Nigga I was just playin' about you not speakin' da language/
To battle me you'll have to pull out every word you know,
But after shit, bitch, and fuck, you got a blank line to show./
You might as well bend ova, 'cause you about to be fucked,
Musta hit your red button, you about to Lyrically Self-Destruct/
I always make Good on my M.C. hunting, so you can call me Will,
Wait till you choke on your bars, then you can claim Lyrically Ill./
Let me try my hand at Spanglish, Tu leave la musica alone hoy?
'Cause we know you ain't no True Thug- Enough said Homeboy./

~CJ~

note: for the personals in the opener and the closer, just check his profile.

alright checkin in................................

Chippendales the only place he's gettin booked for a show//
thats what line 6 should say

DAMN Thought you the man....after droppin that Beat//

thought thats what this line should say

guess i type to fuckin fast lol

YO DIS AN HOT BATTLE

DELEON

PUNCHES 7/10
FLOWZ 8/10
PERSONALS 7/10
VOCAB 6/10
=28

COUNTREE JAY

PUNCHES 9/10
FLOWZ 8/10
PERSONALS 8/10
VOCAB (NONE)
=25
CLOSE BATTLE DELEON U HAD SOME GOOD FLOWZ AND GOOD PERSONALS// LIKED YO STRUTURE TOO//

DA BEST LINE=how you gonna beat me?...Bitch state your reason//
the only time Jay "Iller" than me....is during flu season//

WORST LINE=if wack rhymes was a crime.....Countree Jay would be on Death Row//
Chippendales the place he's gettin booked for a show//

BUT HAD SOME GOOD PUNCHES

COUNTREE JAY

BEST LINE=To battle me you'll have to pull out every word you know,
But after shit, bitch, and fuck, you got a blank line to show./
You might as well bend ova, 'cause you about to be fucked,
Musta hit your red button, you about to Lyrically Self-Destruct

DATS GOOD NICE PUNCHES BUT DIDNT HIT HARD DAN DELEON


WORST LINE=Let me try my hand at Spanglish, Tu leave la musica alone hoy?
'Cause we know you ain't no True Thug- Enough said Homeboy./

BUT OVERALL

VOTE=DELEON

damn hot battle.

COUNTRY:real hot verse.good flow,you need to work on structure a tad but it wasnt a major issue.good wordplay,um real hot.
best line:To battle me you'll have to pull out every word you know,
But after shit, bitch, and fuck, you got a blank line to show./
good line,simple wordplay,but real good.
worst line:Let me try my hand at Spanglish, Tu leave la musica alone hoy?
'Cause we know you ain't no True Thug- Enough said Homeboy./
weak ender.nothing to say.
work on:you need to work on some stronger more effective wordplay but apart from that everything was real hot.
overall:7/10.hot.
DELEON:real hot shit as well,verse not as hot as countree but a couple weak lines on his part might give you the upper hand.flow was good,structure:nothing to say,um wordplay was real good too.
best line:how you gonna beat me?...Bitch state your reason//
the only time Jay "Iller" than me....is during flu season//
good shit,funny and straight to the point.lol
worst line:none.i couldnt find one.
work on: hmmmm nothing really just punches this battle was missing some good punches.
overall:7.5/10.hot

FINAL VOTE: DELEON.he won by a half point.both those verses were hot shit.nothing else to say.countree keep up your good work youre real hot at battlin.deleon you good like always.

FUCK!!!!!! i just realized i cant vote on dis shit.musteve been blacklisted by countree.but w/e keep it real alla yall

I don't got no one blacklisted, you just don't got enough posts or wins to vote in elevated prolly. And both of you didn't read that I said check his profile to understand the opener and the closer, the parts that are highlighted. And Toxic, how can someone get no points for vocabulary you faggot?

~CJ~

my vote
 

Occupation: Killin' dis katz? Must be a form of Spanglish,
Nigga I was just playin' about you not speakin' da language/
the link added an effect but it wasnt a really good punch....6/10
To battle me you'll have to pull out every word you know,
But after shit, bitch, and fuck, you got a blank line to show./
Better....7/10
You might as well bend ova, 'cause you about to be fucked,
Musta hit your red button, you about to Lyrically Self-Destruct/
No really hard punch!....7/10
I always make Good on my M.C. hunting, so you can call me Will,
Wait till you choke on your bars, then you can claim Lyrically Ill./
Still waiting for a hard one....6/10
Let me try my hand at Spanglish, Tu leave la musica alone hoy?
'Cause we know you ain't no True Thug- Enough said Homeboy./
haha nice closer....8/10

Verse Score - 34/50 = 68%

Okay CJ...you didnt have direct hard hitting punches!!....need to work on ur meta's....they will add the eeffect u need.....flow was good...wordplay was good....decent verse....just werk on ur meta's and usin personals more...

CJ your not "Wack"....your just lyrically challenged//
sayin ya off tha "scale".....but your gettin kicked with my "New Balance"//
Good meta...nice punch...8/10
Screamin....DeLeon!!! ya runnin and duckin for cover//
tha only "Lethal Weapon" you got is the DVD with "Danny Glover"//
Nice punch....8/10
if wack rhymes was a crime.....Countree Jay would be on Death Row//
Chippendales the place he's gettin booked for a show//
Not feelin the punch...coulda gone places wit the first line....5/10
how you gonna beat me?...Bitch state your reason//
the only time Jay "Iller" than me....is during flu season//
Okay...7/10
Though you the man....after droppin that Beat//
On tha street...I'd leave ya face lookin like it was crab meat//
Bad...very bad....3/10
Yo Jay.....heard when ya not on tha net...your softer than a hostess//
Next time put more thought in your rhymes and snap the fuck outta hypnosis//
Decent closer....7/10

Verse Score - 38/60 = 63%

Aight...with your first couple bars i thought you were gonna take this...u started off with good meta's and punches....but than u fell off.....that crab meat line was horrible...it killed your verse....u woulda beeen betta off with out it....flow was off b/c of stretched lines.....wordplay was good....jus werk on sustaining the tempo and keeping good punches in ur verse...

Vote - CJ...more consistent verse....

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Thanks.......

Uppin' 4 Votes ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

~CJ~

uppin for some votes and if you explain your shit poll tha vote....

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