anycrews read this - adopted son for calls
 

HooK
i'm gonna ride~down wit u//
i'm gonna shine~bright u threw//
they claim that hope is all do//
they shamed my name~yet still i'm koo//
fuck skoolz~fools tooled in proof the puddin cum from the truth//

Verse 1
kill mah world on mah shine~marry the devil~sell mah soul for a dime//
hope an postin on pride~gloatin u die~gonna fry~alotta die u gonna cry//
i brush pas so fas like loosin cash bring a tear to eye~confide entwine divide the line between poor an devine~mah two ego's collide~wen the collide the world awaits awaitin a betta time//
unkind shit wieghs like a ton~prodical son~logical~wen it cums to poppin mah gun~see u run think it fun till i shot twice~once maybe once more to much~u gone lites out lifes out~u bitch admit u dun//
mos the crews trippin spittin enrichen themselfs suckin cock like a trick~i'm lookin for forma fun maybe into familly till den~the self scum form ov a thug//
progressed mah shootin form i ain't bother no mo wit a gun~piss me off~giv mah dick a quick tugg~u jus drowned in yah hood~covered in spunk//
mah shit stinks i think the devil incorparated rap~jonny rotton got maki bumpin out punk//
bang bang bang mother fucka fuck hang hang hang mutha fucka suk man man man man mutha fucka use yah hand motha fucka u ain't pissin but tossin me off its all wank looka half the crews strikin wit der fam hambags//
while ur momma dinna tits sag~i say fuck that~fuck that hag i had turned round words found reason to meanin~screamin bitch u like that//
but she ain't awake~an she don't though this ma dick she can taste~like me to u lryically~physically get raped//


short spit

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whats tha verdict need tha ppl for the comments

u should write in bars its easier to read. that was aight the hook needs some work u should up on ya vocab n find better ways to word ya lines n work on ya structure but it was aight

yea it was hard to read and it needed some work but overall not to bad iight keep elecvatin...........

it was igth nice job

wat up wat up
 

ayo dat was nice namean? sum work needed but yo errbody need a lil work.. so was up u think maybe u wanna be down wit NDOT? we ill for real dawg... i'll take that as ya try owt n u prolly in... jus say tha word

im feeln it, shiet if i had a good rap crew ritte now, i'd probley give u a chance, aright tho, peace.