Blak Siinz \\\\//// demobx
 

10-12lines
house rules
no feeding


spit 2 hours after check in

Im on fucking flames engulf the lames like you trying to run game
knowing that when you shoot you aim straight for your own chest
not working with a full deck streets ate you up and spit up so i can eat up the rest ,
cause i smell the stench of a homothug got close to your ducky in the bathtub
the result of no acceptance now you pretendin you a gansta for some attention which is only getting you shot down like a hunters next dinner session the only impression youll be leavin is the completion of this beating that i'm sending ending you in a flash
Is it flash?chose the right name to describe how your victory lasts Cause I crash atomically your affects like a minor gash

Aight i could keep going but i gotta go
PEEEEEEEEEACE By the way Im a female in case you aint know ONE LOVE

ill get to this when im back on.....im mad tired as fuck....pc though man........and g'luck wit da battle.....ez

fuck it here i go.....quick 10liner for this noob


kid i see ya yappin ya mouth and i gotta tell u ur lame and all-
could be egypts god of sun, but never earn the name of 'Ra'
settin up this battle got me in the position of drivin ya hearse-
cuz its obvious im in 'control of dmob' like i was typin ya verse
my words are deadly there here for sure to trouble you-
and like the lil bitch group ull see '3L' before the 'W'
someone time me im gauranteed to this fag ill break her fast-
i see ur gay, named herself "Mob" so dudes can spank her ass
kid ima give u a hint about ya verses, u got lots of filling-
so if u see this 'dude reign' its cuz i threw her off the building

fuck it im tired and cant think straight......pc

wow no contest blak took em on this one
noob was right here he definately was missing a few words in his flow
i mean on every level any one with an ounce of ryme skill would 5-0 this battle im not saying that in the future he wont be nice but i recomend you read some battles homie and get ya format and ryme skill down a bit good try tho
v-blak

I agree, Blak was just flex'n a littel verbal muscle there, nice wordplay nice punches very creative and it flowed tight. The opener was better than demo's as well as the finisher. Demo you could also go more to a bar style verse that would enchance yoru punches and make it flow tighter.

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demobx l won this because he had better structure, punches and just better verse overall. I thought the other verse didn't flow very well nad had nasty punchlines for it to be offended or evem take you serious. demobx won dis quite easerly with his rymes n punches. No hard feelings

Gonna give this to Blak he completly ripped ya sry dawg but its the truth ur 1st 2 lines didnt rhyme! u forgot it and carried on elevate dawg.

V/Blak Siinz

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blak you killed her. better punches and multiples. step it up though cuz you gotta grow up fast. demobx not a bad verse for a girl. yes i said that, girls can't spit. naw just kiddin. you lost b/c you didn't come hard enough. step up ppl.retunt the fava

vote=blak

yo fine mind you fucking bitch.....dont vote in my battle right after i get done merking you becuase its just a hate vote.........aint no way he had a better verse......pc


uppin this fucking shit

UPPIN THIS SHIT.....pc

Yo this was a pretty easy vote, Black Siinz just had punches workin to the full effect--- Heres an example of what a couple battle bars should look like...

settin up this battle got me in the position of drivin ya hearse-
cuz its obvious im in 'control of dmob' like i was typin ya verse
my words are deadly there here for sure to trouble you-
and like the lil bitch group ull see '3L' before the 'W'--
This got a couple chuckles, I think the second bar was really creative-- Your whole verse pretty much went like this, lots of good wordplay, strong punches and good flow+structure.... Demobox didn't come as strong his flow was lackin, the punches weren't as hard it wasn't horrible but it aint comparin to black siinz... good battle yall return the flav sometime. Vote Black

okay uppin this shit for the 5th vote.................

Im on fucking flames engulf the lames like you trying to run game
knowing that when you shoot you aim straight for your own chest

^^ Maybe it's just me...but there's some strange MOVEMENT on RB to fuck up END RHYME...I read verse after verse where the LINES just don't rhyme...STOP IT!..weak punch

the result of no acceptance now you pretendin you a gansta for some attention which is only getting you shot down like a hunters next dinner

^^^^????????? fuck it..i ain't readin no more

kid i see ya yappin ya mouth and i gotta tell u ur lame and all-
could be egypts god of sun, but never earn the name of 'Ra'

^^ good flow...creative...but not that hard of a punch

settin up this battle got me in the position of drivin ya hearse-
cuz its obvious im in 'control of dmob' like i was typin ya verse

^^ good punch

kid ima give u a hint about ya verses, u got lots of filling-
so if u see this 'dude reign' its cuz i threw her off the building

^^ decent closer

Vote: BLACK..his verse actually rhymed..and his punches actually landed

But..Black..u could make your verse more complex with set up...using more WORDPLAY and metas...ur flow is good...but it's a fine line and compromise between shorter liness for flow..and longer structure for more complex punches...


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