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-bODy CoUnT- 05-16-04 04:35 PM

Quick freestyle...Feedback plz
 
Da Lyrical Villain
2Day i begin a new life... rippin every cat possible it starts here...

My styles not based on complexity//
Even if you beat me in a battle, you'll never get the best of me//
Cracked cats who tested me//
My dogs saw illegal rhymes so they lyrically arrested me//
And the studio was my rhyme cell//
I was placed there, cuz i muredered the beat when it fell//
My mind flip on cats who i hate, at a murderous rate//
Eatin every cat in the place, not to much on my plate//
Im hungry,My appeities been way to small as of late//
Movin on up in the world like the FLY in my weight//
I need to be more villainous, commitin more lyrical sins//
Change the frame of the world so the BAD GUY always wins//
A new cat raw in this game i should be staff//
Dearly departed im heartless look at your lyrical death and laugh//

pInkMonkeY 05-16-04 07:13 PM

it was a shitty freestyle, just to say the least
u have basic rhymes, nuff said, work on non
freestyles before u try to put poetry to words

Soul Sickness 06-02-04 01:01 PM

yea i wasnt feelin it either it needed some major improvement keep elevatin...........................


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