The Mesage - Immediate feedback plz!**!
FEEDBACK IMMEDIATLY PLZ
try to say this at a slow pace but but with a beat i feel like what da hell was i thinking, got shot by da shotgun, now am sinkin what can i do, sittin in da hospital lettin doc search on me - be optical, i can let all niggas know one thing, thiers only one life, and one love so they can only be one king overnight we all crazy wantin a bitch, must be da crack - everyone on my street takes dat shit, a thug changes, a love changes and u know a best friends become strangers fake niggas try to copy, so they shot me am alive and they thought they got me now u know i got a bullet-proof vest strapped to my chest tuckin a gun in wasit while i dress, i feel like am gettin old, my mind gettin cold, am livin in prison and i dont even get pe-role. even to my dyin days, while they gettin away, my memories are beggining to fade. how long we moan? u left me on my own, homie u and me should have been together, but now am alone, all i do is think about death, fuck all playa's cause am da last one left! PLZ FEEDBACK I NEE U GUYS HELP PLZ HELP ME :thumbup: |
Plz Some FeedBack Plz I wud Appriciate It :)
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shomon??
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weak overall i jus wasnt feelin it u need to keep elevatin iight good luck kid..........................
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annoy insane he don't kno good posts if it kicked him in the ass, iight.
wasn't the best but look at insanes 1st post and you'll see it was worse! |
ok needs work had good flow
work on vocab and structure pretty good keep droppin |
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