Dear Dad
 

this is a song bout the dad ive never met....im new to this game so go easy on the critisisim. and if its no trouble could y"all give it a rating...thx
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okay, my mother was dumb to have me so young but your the scum who shot his cum then done a fucking run./.
you left ma mum hung drawn and quarted. gave birth to a son who grew up more like a daughter./.
because you werent around i spent most of my early days. with ma sis clowning around acting girlie ways./.
when most boys my age played army. i"d be cuddling barnie or playing fucking barbie./.
at primary school i hardly had any homies.and the freinds i did played with ma little pony./.
if only youd stayed i mighten of been so lonely. you could of taught me how to make freinds with male cronies./.
i cant belive id sit by the phone hopeing youd phone me. how the fuck could you jus throw me away after youve known me./.
god you must be one phoney exuse of a man. and what i cant understand is why mam even got with you DAMM!./.
id love to throw a right hand and knock you from where you stand into cucoo land when we meet im going demand./.
you expand beyond your normal self centerd thoughts. notice i aint mentiond your name thats coz youd enter the courts./.
then my temper would cause riots, cahos, havoc. you want a 20 grand lawsuit okay you can have it./.
coz id pay double that to get my fucking hands on you. and i know for a fact that my mam would too./.
chourus
dear dad that ive never had. it makes me sad to think how bad. i wanna stab.. you in the throat then watch you choke..(choir) ON YOUR OWN BLOOD

look peeps. i aint got any other verses to go with it jus yet but am busy working on it......rate it and let me know if its worth finishing :thumbup: :nono:

that was aight i wasnt really feeling the verse, if u plan on finishing it i suggest u work on it more to make sure its worthy of a song, i've heard songs by people who wrote about a father they never had but this wasnt what i thought it would be but ill give u a 4/10

nice drop man...good shit...heavy shit dog

8.5/10

nice drop///

nice one...........upping for feedback 1

thats some serious shyt i give it 8/10 im sure it will be alot betta when u finish it all up though..............