Tonges tied up/ Chemical overdoes- Check it out- FEEDBACK PLZ!!!!As soon as u read
Listen to me// Whilst ur tonge is tied up//
ull neva spit ill shit on this rap game// ur some wakked up rap shit wid a lame name// Your despensing all ur shit, thinking your gona get fame// It'll never happen hunni// And im the one to blame// The only feedback you'll get is shame// Im gna burn u up like a flame// Im baby gal// da only girl that can fight u off// rip ur head off// and toss it to the crowd// of undispersed followeres like u// ill rip the mic off u// take the life outa u// Ill bitch bout u// ill snitch on u// to get what is rightfully mine// for you to follow my mind// you can read my lines// listen up//Whilst ur tonge is tied// You have already tried.....Ive just started But da ting is In ur head ur havin a chemical overdose// All the words u say are goin over me// It's all poetry// Go climb that tree// Wid da lil kids// This rapbattle shit aint for lil kids mitts// Take time back to were it all started// O shit, I forgot ur already bacwords...ur retarded// You try and getta guy but u dont cos ur cold hearted// Your mum and dad have parted// If youmess wid me ur body and neck will be in the same position// I dont need to pre-orginisation// If Iw anted I could please the nation// Belevie it// Make it hapen// O fuck it...Ill do some more shite later |
Can I have feedback soona s poss please!! Even if u dont like it please holla at me
thnx |
it was alright, not bad. could be more complex though with more metaphors
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yea im wit logic on this 1 keep elevatin iight baby.............................................. .............
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sum iight shyt..
best line no doubt was
"O shit, I forgot ur already bacwords...ur retarded//" lmao nice.. but yo i aint gone tell u to "elevate" cuz i fuckin hate that word... pick up a dictionary peepl.. theres more words like that!!! lmao yea jus keep bumpin da hood shyt n u good wit me... |
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