here for the first time check it out
 

this is my first spit on this thread so dont dis me 2 much im llokin for some feed back so i can elevate

im here to show these rookies how this shyt is done/
these kids soft as cookies fallin to my smokin gun/
travel to bitches blocks and let loose slugs/
thats the end of this lil pretty boy he got a holy mug/
thats the last time he eva gunna call himself thug/
yes im mean thats what im hear for/
violence is all my minds geared for/
you wanna hear more/
call me hova the way i make the crowd roar/
everytime man fuk the encore/

iight can i get some feed back on dis 1.............

thats all gd

thynx baby yo nebody else wanna hit up dis man c'mon i need some feed back uppin.....................................

uppin again............................................. .................................................. .

uppin yo y wont nebody hit dis up................................................ ....................

ok u need 2 work on ur vocab multis and flow usin the same word 2 make shit rhyme is corny in my opinio ur new though so pretty good drop

iight thynx for the feedback see thats all i want people lets keep it comin uppin.....................

uppin for some more feedback.......................................... ..............................

that was tight i liked ya 2nd line

iight thynx for the feedback uppin..............